Another "CV" Thread

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Sorry, I hate them aswell but would like some crit on this please :)

Curriculum Vitae

Details:
Name: *
Address: *,
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Phone: *
Mobile: *
E-Mail: *
D.O.B: *

Profile:
A well presented, dependable, hardworking male currently studying for the final year of A level’s looking to gain experience working with other people and the general public.

Education:
· 1993 – 2000: *school name
· 2000 – Present: *school name

Qualifications:
· 2006 – AS levels – Business Studies (A), I.C.T (B), General Studies (B) Biology (C), Physics (C), Critical Thinking (D)
· 2005 – GCSE – Physics (A), Spanish (A), Design and Technology (A), Biology (B), English Language (B), English Literature (B), Music (B), Maths (B), Chemistry (B), Religious Studies (C), ICT Short Course (C)

Work Experience:
November 2005:
Wirral Borough Council IT department
Worked in the hardware section resolving problems with PC’s. Worked as a team to diagnose a problem and then go out to fix the problem. Learnt how to build a computer from scratch and it showed me that working as a team helps to solve problems faster than working by yourself. Gained an insight into how a business manages its employees and developed my knowledge of real life team working situations.

Career Objectives:
At this moment in time I am looking for some experience in a business that would expose me to the general public, want to work with people to gain confidence and wish to give my best effort in work.

Interests/Activities:
Enjoy playing football, squash and am in a senior badminton team. Enjoy spending my free time on my computer, playing games on my PC or consoles and speaking with friends online. Also play in the college band where I play clarinet which I have played for over 8 years, we practice 2 times per week, have played many concerts and have been on two tours to Spain and Italy. At college I am a 6th form prefect and have been chosen to represent the school at open days and information evenings. I also enjoy digital photography and enjoy editing and enhancing the photos.


Not sure if the Profile bit is needed and do the grades need subjects or should I just put the grades down?
 
It's an AS that I got the book for 2 days before the exam and yet still got 100% on everything I had time to answer (mid 90 something percent of the paper).

It tests whether you actually have a clue what's going on. Depending on the career, people like it. The classic examples are that if you're applying for a law or politics degree they look very highly at it.

In your case I probably would take the Critical Thinking off of your CV - getting a D in it is not a good thing or something that makes you more employable.
 
Profile - needs work and extending.

combine education and qaulification.

leave as with grades as those are your highest awards, just say 11 a -c grades at gcse (inc, english and maths).

remove
"Enjoy spending my free time on my computer, playing games on my PC or consoles and speaking with friends online."
"we practice 2 times per week"
Maybe try shortening the rest as well.

Combine Career objectives and profile.

any absolutes for the jobs?
had such and such training, even if its just first aid, health and safety ect?
I would also advise bullet points for jobs, keeps it easy to read and short, remember a cv is back ground and is there to make sure you have the right skills, the Cover letter is to pick out key points and to go into detail.

for example
• Developing and updating knowledge and skills on the form and function of all track components, including common problems and issues and possible solutions
• Adhering to specific procedures including those relating to Health & Safety
• Liaising with various contacts to develop excellent working relationships

use theasaurs, it's great change common boring words into things that grap peoples attention, but don't over do it.

instead of meeting use Liaising ect
 
Arsey said:
looking to gain experience working with other people and the general public.
This makes it seem like you're a bit of a loner tbh. A better wording would be:

A well presented, dependable, hardworking person, studying for the final year of A levels. Among other goals, I am looking to further improve my ability to work within a high performance team and to interact with the public on a level that drives customer interest and, ultimately, sales.
 
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