Can someone proof read this please :P

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:05

Hi all,

I’m trying for a position at Sainsbury’s called CTS (Customer and trading support) for example I have my boss the department manager and he/she has the deputy manager and then the store manager. I will work under the department manager. Max McAllister (who this is going to) is the personnel manager. I think I need more BS to suck up about to further my career, if someone can proof read and check spelling etc would be handy. I’ve typed this in word and it passes the test etc just making sure

Dear Max McAllister,

I am interested in the CTS position for Produce. I moved to fresh foods from checkouts in which I had been serving them for about seven or more years and. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks, and also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers. I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s

Yours sincerely

(Name)

JohnnyG · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:07

No full stop needed after the first 'and'

Priapus · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:10

Mp4 said:
Hi all,

I’m trying for a position at Sainsbury’s called CTS (Customer and trading support) for example I have my boss the department manager and he/she has the deputy manager and then the store manager. I will work under the department manager. Max McAllister (who this is going to) is the personnel manager. I think I need more BS to suck up about to further my career, if someone can proof read and check spelling etc would be handy. I’ve typed this in word and it passes the test etc just making sure

Dear Max McAllister,

I am interested in the CTS position for Produce. I moved to fresh foods from checkouts in which I had been serving them for about seven or more years. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks, I also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers. I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s.

Yours sincerely

(Name)

Fixed what I thought was wrong. Not too sure on what it is you're going to be doing, so can't add to it, sorry.

VIRII · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:12

I don't like that at all.

Firstly it is either Dear Max (which I doubt is going to be appropriate) or Dear Mr McAllister.

I think that all you need to say after that is "I would like to apply for the CTS role.
Yours sincerely,
Your name."

Tru · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:16

Just say you want to apply for the job. If he wants to know what you can do, he'll ask your current gaffer.

fanger · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:23

You are taking the ****, surely.

Priapus · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:23

Don't think he is. You also need to fully start out the sweary.

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:29

Dear Maxine McAllister,

I would like to apply for the CTS position for Produce. I moved to fresh foods from checkouts in which I had been serving them for about seven or more years. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks; I also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers. I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s.

Yours sincerely,

(Name)

Basically

CTS = I work under my department manager (longer hours, paper work, run a team of people etc) and then after a few courses + years I can then be a department manager.

And im not taking the **** thank you very much , Tru i wish it was that easy but they want a piece of paper saying that i want this position, it sucks big time.

Vix · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:29

Dear Miss McAllister,

I would like to apply for the CTS position for Produce. I moved to fresh foods from checkouts in which I had been serving for around seven years. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks, I also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers. I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s, and hope you will consider me for this position.

Yours sincerely

(Name)

^^ Thats how I'd word it anyway. Edited as I noticed you changed Max to Maxine! Any way you can find out if she is married?

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:35

trying to find that out acctaully as i dont know ..lol

^ her name badge just says Max also

fanger · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:35

Just in case you're not...try this...

Dear Mr McAllister,

I’m writing to express my interest in the current vacancy of:

CTS position for Produce

I have recently made the move to fresh foods from checkout activities, a position I have both enjoyed and served in for nearly seven years. I would now, however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company.

I’m qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks and also have an in depth knowledge of the shop, the shop floor and customer interaction, all of which I would hope, qualify me for consideration for this role.

I understand that this is only an initial approach to you and with that in mind, if I can supply any further details which would assist in my application, I would be happy to supply them,

Many Thanks for you time,

YOUR NAME HERE

ScarySquirrel · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:37

Just get a bit of toilet paper and write "can i have CTS job plz?" on it.

Vix · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:37

fanger said:
Just in case you're not...try this...

Dear Mr McAllister,

I’m writing to express my interest in the current vacancy of:

CTS position for Produce

I have recently made the move to fresh foods from checkout activities, a position I have both enjoyed and served in for nearly seven years. I would now, however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company.

I’m qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks and also have an in depth knowledge of the shop, the shop floor and customer interaction, all of which I would hope, qualify me for consideration for this role.

I understand that this is only an initial approach to you and with that in mind, if I can supply any further details which would assist in my application, I would be happy to supply them,

Many Thanks for you time,

YOUR NAME HERE

Winner. Except don't call her a man.

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:37

ScarySquirrel said:
Just get a bit of toilet paper and write "can i have CTS job plz?" on it.

LOL

I have recently made the move to fresh foods from checkout activities, a position I have both enjoyed and served in for nearly seven years. I would now, however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company.

i might need to change that in some way i've been on Fresh Foods now for about a year and checkouts for about eight

(9yrs? / 1998) kin hell ..lol

thanks for your help so far all , im crap at doing all this interview malarkie

Tru · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:48

Mp4 said:
Tru i wish it was that easy but they want a piece of paper saying that i want this position, it sucks big time.

That's what I was suggesting you put in your letter, I know you can't just walk up and ask them for the job!

I'd keep it short but if you want to go into detail, use fangers one.

edit: except don't use 'Many thanks for your time', that's just gay.

fanger · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:50

Alright - changes...

Dear Mr McAllister,

I’m writing to express my interest in the current vacancy of:

CTS position for Produce

I have recently made the move to fresh foods from checkout activities, a position I have both enjoyed and served in for nearly seven years. I would now, however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company. I have also worked in Fresh Foods for the last 12 months, a role I have enjoyed and taken an active parcipatary role in. – yes, it was me that stopped the potentially lethal Cold Counter “Brie Cheese Scare” only 3 months ago!!! – and that put the ****ing wind up me I can tell you…but all this is beside the point…

I’m qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks and also have an in depth knowledge of the shop, the shop floor and customer interaction, all of which I would hope, qualify me for consideration for this role.

I understand that this is only an initial approach to you and with that in mind, if I can supply any further details which would assist in my application, I would be happy to supply them,

Many Thanks for you time,

YOUR NAME HERE

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:52

fanger said:
Alright - changes...

Dear Mr McAllister,

I’m writing to express my interest in the current vacancy of:

CTS position for Produce

I have recently made the move to fresh foods from checkout activities, a position I have both enjoyed and served in for nearly seven years. I would now, however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company. I have also worked in Fresh Foods for the last 12 months, a role I have enjoyed and taken an active parcipatary role in. – yes, it was me that stopped the potentially lethal Cold Counter “Brie Cheese Scare” only 3 months ago!!! – and that put the ****ing wind up me I can tell you…but all this is beside the point…

LOLOLOL

Thanks for that ill have an edit and think on this

ta for your help all

MikeTimbers · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:55

Dear Miss McAllister,

I would like to apply for the CTS position for Produce. I have been working in the fresh foods section for {x months/years}; before that I worked on the checkouts for around seven years. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks, I also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers and I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s. I hope you will consider me for this position.

Yours sincerely

(Name)

Mp4 · 3 Aug 2006 at 21:59

I’m writing to express my interest in the current vacancy of:

CTS position for Produce

I have worked in Fresh Foods for the last 12 months; I have enjoyed and taken an active role in, since my move from checkout activities. A position I have enjoyed and served in for over eight years. I would now; however, like to progress my career with Sainsbury’s and take on a more challenging role within the company.

I’m qualified to use the bailer and pump truck and also have an in depth knowledge of the shop, the shop floor and customer interaction, all of which I would hope, qualify me for consideration for this role.

I understand that this is only an initial approach to you and with that in mind, if I can supply any further details which would assist in my application, I would be happy to supply them,

Many Thanks for you time,

andy@moFo · 3 Aug 2006 at 22:01

Dear Max McAllister,

I am interested in the CTS position for Produce. I moved to fresh foods from checkouts in which I had been serving them for about seven or more years and. I am qualified to use the bailer and pump trucks, and also have knowledge of the shop and how to interact with customers. I am looking to further my career within Sainsbury’s

Yours sincerely

(Name)[/QUOTE]

i work on produce in the sainsburys whitley bay store, are you sure you want to become a CTS? i got offered the job but refused it as i wouldnt be able to continue my other job. i would strongly recommend speaking to your manager in person and duty managers and even the store manager and make your interest known to everyone. good luck with it though if its really what you want!