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LiamC

LiamC

LiamC

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I forgot how hard these were to make !!

I've thrown this together and just wondering if the kind people of OcUk would have a quick glance over it and see where i can improve.

PROFILE

I am an organised and hard working person who will show reliability and commitment whilst at work. I am very helpful person who can work well in a mixture of different environments including solo and team work. I am a competent and well-mannered person who is quick and always willing to learn new skills and methods of working.

SKILLS AND ACHIEVEMENTS

1 Good People Skills
2 Good IT Skills
3 Great knowledge of health and safety when working.
4 Able to work as a team or on my own
5 Excellent attendance and timekeeping
6 Always looking to learn new skills and knowledge
7 Ability to communicate and work effectively with people at all levels.
8 Excellent Communication skills.


EDUCATION

2007-2008 - Stevenson College Edinburgh, Scotland
Advanced computing – Pass

2002-2007 Forrester High School Edinburgh, Scotland

Highers
Int 1 Maths (C), English (C)
Int 2 Chemistry (B), Computing (B)

Standard Grades
English – General 4
Computing – General 4
Chemistry - Credit 2
Physics – General 3
Music - Credit 2
Maths – Foundation 5
German – General 3
Geography - Credit 2
Employment

Warehouse Assistant in "Parts Center"
2008 - 2009
Duties included making sure stock was put away efficently and correctly. Ensuring Good in and out were correct and undamaged.
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I was going to add "activities and interests" at the bottom but i doubt the person reading would care.

Im going to apply to Game and Frankie & bennies ( Bar, Catering etc ), So ill need to change it to focus more on them.




Many Thanks !!!
 
PROFILE

I am an organised and hard working person who will show reliability and commitment whilst at work. I am very helpful person who can work well in a mixture of different environments including solo and team work. I am a competent and well-mannered person who is quick and always willing to learn new skills and methods of working.

WORK:

Warehouse Assistant in "Parts Center"
2008 - 2009
Duties included making sure stock was put away efficently and correctly. Ensuring Good in and out were correct and undamaged.

SKILLS AND ACHIEVEMENTS

1 Good People Skills
2 Good IT Skills
3 Great knowledge of health and safety when working.
4 Able to work as a team or on my own
5 Excellent attendance and timekeeping
6 Always looking to learn new skills and knowledge
7 Ability to communicate and work effectively with people at all levels.
8 Excellent Communication skills.


EDUCATION

2007-2008 - Stevenson College Edinburgh, Scotland
Advanced computing – Pass

2002-2007 Forrester High School Edinburgh, Scotland

Highers
Int 1 Maths (C), English (C)
Int 2 Chemistry (B), Computing (B)

Standard Grades
English – General 4
Computing – General 4
Chemistry - Credit 2
Physics – General 3
Music - Credit 2
Maths – Foundation 5
German – General 3
Geography - Credit 2
Employment
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Havnt changed any of the words but thats a better layout. I would suggest beefing out what you did in the "parts center", anything else to add to prev jobs after/before that?
 
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Use bullet points instead of numbers for the skills list.

If you search for curriculum vitae in general discussion you'll find loads of advice. I had to do mine again over the weekend and after reading some of the threads on here I completely changed the look of it for the better.

So hard trying to put who you are and what you've done on paper, got a couple of interviews now so hopefully I won't have to do it again for a while. :o
 
I was always taught to write the part about yourself in the third person. Maybe thats just graduate cv.s though.

Here's mine.

Honest, confident, hardworking and highly articulate graduate. Accustomed to working under pressure, and using own initiative. A person of keen judgement and dependability, poised to leverage education and experience toward a successful career, with an organization in search of, a highly motivated team player, committed to supporting organization objectives.

bit long winded, but meh it just got me a job.

Also your list of skills and acheivements could do with improvement. It not very good just to say, I'm good at this.

on mine under the title of communication & presentation i have the following:

Exceptional interpersonal skills. Handle sensitive matters with tact, poise and diplomacy. Good experience in customer facing positions.

and then a keystrengths heading:

Excellent team working and leadership qualities. Able to maintain a good rate of productivity, accuracy, efficiency, and punctuality. Experienced in target based work positions

then computing and admin

Proficiencies include MS office and Windows operating systems, SPSS statistics package. Experienced use in education, and free time.

I think it makes for a better read than just saying good this good that.

Spend a lot of time making it as good as possible. There is a wealth of info out there if you have a search.
 
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Never say "i did this" or "i can do this that and the other".

I would say 1 page or less is too little information and more than 2 pages is too much. Use bullet points and expand on each one.

I might see if I can dig my old one up for you

Edit... Just looking at what others have said, I would personally keep the format as you had it as that is how i have mine, but each to there own if GUrkha has it in a different style :)
 
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The only time when I have written a third person CV was for an internal CV at a consulting company where they hand the CV to clients for selection. Hence to the client it's going to read as if the company is writing about the individual.

For CVs you're selling yourself. You should be able to convey the information without breaking into song "I, I, I, I, ..." (Dusty Springfield "I believe you").

My first impression is there's no information. The reason I say this you've used very passive wording that make it as if you don't care about it. There's even a typo "Good"..

Duties included making sure stock was put away efficently and correctly. Ensuring Good in and out were correct and undamaged.
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Show me the action, your responsibility, your success, at least that you didn't play ping pong...

Ok, so you dealt with stock. Did you check in stock? Did you stock take? Did you check out stock? Did you discuss stock levels with current trends? For example did you see that you're going to run out quick if the current rate continues?

You may have just been a "warehouse assistant" in your eyes but it is a job that you did well. Showing you care about the role is going to make employers think that you take your work seriously. This is what I pick up from your language..
 
It is a very poor CV. You should not mention "i, me, my" etc. Also, I have seen a thousand cv's which state "i have good people skills" or " i can work well as part of a team", these are standard things which most people include on their cv. You need to set yourself apart from the rest. I would not call that section skills and achievements, perhaps call it abilities.
 
This thread has just made me re-evaluate the CV I had just made for some part time bar work to go with my other job. I thought it was pretty good to be honest, but now that you mention it, I think it would be a lot better without all the I's :)
 
Mine's not great but here's an example of mine so you can see some of the language (active etc).

Professional Experience
Technical Product Manager, Acompany, TheLocation, UK — Month 2007 - Month 2009
Reporting to the Director of Product Management, Some Business Unit
A brief few line introduction to Acompany. www.acompany.com

The Technical Product Manager possesses market awareness, commercial empathy and is responsible for owning and delivering the vision to market.

• Technical responsibility and leadership for a $10M industry award winning product, an innovation that opened a blue ocean market and strengthened portfolio value proposition strategy.

• Primary technical interface and focal point for global sales, marketing, portfolio product management and regional customers; responsible for the identification and capture of market problems into requirements, driving prioritisation, managing balance and roadmap for release business cases.

• Provided technology leadership; responsible for research, evaluation and selection of emerging technologies (software and hardware); performed competitive analysis and delivered a product that exceeds market and competitive strategic requirements within demanding timescales.

• Evangelised product; produced marketing and sales collateral; preparing and presenting product presentations and demonstrations to customers during pre-sales, workshops and events along with training for sales, business development during kickoffs.

• Guided global sales force during opportunity RFx responses; performed bespoke high value solution product consultation, validation and approval.

• Responsible for the delivery of product from multiple development centres (Czech, USA, Bangalore); authority for senior product architects and team leads; key stakeholder for development gates. Interface for operational feedback and performance; acountable for product quality, ensuring product upheld company ISO quality certification and reputation (value add) for solid, dependable products.

• Vast experience of global mobile telecoms industry, operator networks and technologies (ITU, 3GPP/2, OMA, GSM, ANSI, MAP, SS7, SIGTRAN, SIP, SMS, SMPP, MM7, TCP/IP, RADIUS, Diameter variants) along with mainstream technologies and methodologies (C/C++, Java, NetBeans, MySQL, Oracle, LDAP, RedHat Linux, SOAP, HTTP, WMware, HP servers and STGs, SUN, Cisco IP and ITP, SAN).

Product Specialist, Acompany, TheLocation, UK — Month 2005 - Month 2007
Reporting to the Director of Business Development, Some Business Unit
• Architected and presented solutions to customers problems for APAC, MENA, EMEA and US markets; constructed sales responses (including architecture and financial quote summaries for director approval)
• Provided product and solution guidance to global sales force and business development, including taking the innovative product ‘TheProduct’ to market, prospecting, qualifying customers before selection then achieving initial sale and to go-live. TheProduct was awarded “Best Mobile Service for Customers” at the 200? Mobile Messaging Awards.
• Responsible for review and approval of product use within presales responses (RFQ/RFI).
• Managed, as acting Technical Product Manager, three products (ProductA, B & C) in addition to role responsibilities - effort recognised with a company reward and role development to Technical Product Manager; stabilised the prototype TheProduct into a repeat saleable product.
• Evangelised to global business development, sales force and customers; presented presales training
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I went back and edited mine as it was over 3 pages long.

Used a little tutorial and stole the template design. Much better :)

 
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Oh :( :D

Going back to your other point, so if not allowed to use I, Me, My etc. should he use instead say "The Applicant has managed a team of 12 people" etc?
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No. "Succesfully managed a team of 12 people which involved blah blah blah project objects were met and blah blah" try and give some substance to each of the points. Don't just make them 4 words long, prove that you have these skills and experience.
 
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