English wording help

[theleg]

Ok guys I need to ask for some help...

Im trying to translate something into english and its hard to make it sound good...Its for a friends tattoo so it needs to sound decent and smooth..

Basically its along the lines of 'after a sweet moment has passed, pain remains for a long time'...

Something alone those lines but which actually sounds good...The words can be changed as long as the meaning remains similar..

Can anyone suggest anything?

Ive got this so far but it still sounds kinda weird :/

Once a sweet moment has passed, the pain lasts much longer

Please help

 

[dalin80]

Pain lasts much longer once the sweet moment has passed.

? still feels odd.

 

[Lysander]

Pain lasts much longer once the sweet moment has passed.

? still feels odd.

Probably because it doesn't make any sense.

 

[daz]

After a sweet moment, the pain still lingers

 

[Mirri]

The sweetest moment leaves the longest pain?

dunno if "the longest pain" is right.

 

[aayzof]

'the sweetest moment passing leaves the longest pain lasting'

 

[Tru]

Any combination of 'sweet' and 'moment' just doesn't sound right to me but you could maybe rhyme 'pain' with 'remain/s' in the second bit.

edit: ^that's a good effort up there

 

[theleg]

Rhyming sounds a bit odd too...

I had no idea how hard translation was :/

 

[theleg]

How does this sound?

a sweet moment is fleeting but the pain lingers

 

[cleanbluesky]

Once a sweet moment is passed, there is a legacy of pain

After each sweet moment, pain regains its place in our hearts

Like dust, a sweet moment passes. Like wind, the pain returns

Each sweet moment must pass, to be chased gently by pain

These sweet moments are illusion that forestalls the return of pain

Sweet moments pass, pain has tenure

 

[theleg]

wow, you just made me fall in love with you CBS

 

[Deadly Ferret]

The simplest & shortest I have thought of is:

The sweet moment lapsed into lingering pain.

 

[SiriusB]

Original:

Once a sweet moment has passed, the pain lasts much longer

Reworded:

Once you have sobered up, the divorce procedings are still there.

 

[moogie]

after pleasure comes pain

 

[Tru]

The sweetness may last for the briefest moment, but, conversely, the pain that stems from such a moment can, and usually will, last considerably longer, probably for life. A tattoo is the opposite because the pain is over in a moment but you're left with sweet ink forever.

 

[theleg]

I think im gonna use this one

Each sweet moment must pass, to be chased gently by pain

Cheers guys...Ill post a pic when she gets it done