Rate my CV please?

Aedus said:
[*]Age or birthday doesn't need to be on there at all, stops discrimination against your age
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Don't include anything on the CV to stop all discrimination and unless your name is David Smith you better leave your name off incase they're racist, just put your email on a blank sheet and you'll get the job due to no discrimination. If they are ageist surely it's better to find out now rather than spending money and time on travelling to an interview only to have the same discrimination when they never phone you back and leave you thinking you have bad interview technique.
 
desires said:
Don't include anything to stop all discrimination. If they are ageist surely it's better to find out now rather than spending money and time on travelling to an interview only to have the same discrimination when they never phone you back and leave you thinking you have bad interview technique.
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Depends really, I'd rather get an interview for more experience regardless if I get the job or not, and you may be able to "Wow" them anyway if given the opportunity. In all honesty if they really want to know your age, they can just look at the dates on your education and get a rough estimate anyway, but I've always been told to keep my D.O.B and age off my CV.
 
yourbookbegins said:
thanks for the advice, but from what I can find on google I've done most of the things they tell you to do on other websites...
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You think you have done most of the things? :eek::confused:

You haven't. Not by a long shot.

A personal profile
This is a short statement at the beginning of your CV to sell yourself, to show your skills, experience and personal qualities. You could include positive words such as ‘competent’, ‘adaptable’, and ‘conscientious’.
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Work Experience:
List the companies that you have worked for, the dates that you worked at them and a brief description of your role. It is important that they are relevant and detailed in short, bullet-pointed statements. Make clear what your individual contribution was using positive language and include your responsibilities and achievements. Back everything up with quantifiable facts, such as size of budgets and results achieved, to make your skills tangible.
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Achievements:
Think carefully about which examples you include in this section, as employers may deduce a lot from your choice about your motivations and what you regard as important. Employers are only interested in your most recent achievements.
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General Skills:
Driving licence details, courses attended, foreign languages and IT (include level of proficiency).
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So no, you have not done most things. That fact that you have apparently looked somewhere on the internet and have taken very little on board, and then come here asking for 'ratings'... The sub context is "I've read what I need to do but I can't be bothered - ocuk write some stuff for me".

Instead, I'll do as you ask and rate it.
3/10. In. The. Bin.


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new version => 5/10. Profile massively improves it. Work exp/volunteering is still adding no value.
 
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You want constructive criticism with out biting my head off?

Well I think its pretty poor.

1. I dont like the boxes at all!!

2. A Levels, do not put that you got a D for something, very bad. I would just say 3 A-Levels in blablabla

3. I think you have done a lot of jobs. Elaborate on what the roles where, where you think they are applicable to what ou are applying for.

4. If you are currently doing two jobs, do not put you are currently a cleaner for Sodexo, not a good image. Leave it with Assistant Editor....

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There is a lot of space at the end of page two, to flesh out your work experience.

Do not go over two pages.
 
Aedus said:
These are just my opinions:
  • Maybe put it over 2 sides, more room to make yourself stand out, never more than 2 sides. Some people may like 1 side, but I think 2 sides is good.
  • Age or birthday doesn't need to be on there at all, stops discrimination against your age
  • Take the information out of the tables and format it properly
  • Put your personal profile at the top
  • Key skills section, possibly?
  • Keep 3 of your latest previous employments/work experiences and instead put a description of what the role entailed, what skills the role gave you and what you learnt from doing the role.
  • Education section below that (Keep all your education in 1 part, don't split it up like you have done, uni stuff at top and A-levels half way down)
  • Interests section, again a possibility.

The formatting especially is really messy, at least what I can see, it needs to look more professional.
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Agree. - Key skills is another good one. What computer skills do you have?

Are you good with Office programs? Good telephone manner?
 
opethdisciple said:
2. A Levels, do not put that you got a D for something, very bad. I would just say 3 A-Levels in blablabla
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I did this once and got an e-mail from the HR asking for the specific results, told the next day they had better candidates. So I tend to just put them on. You got what you got, masking your weaknesses only makes you weaker.
 
Work experience and volunteering all looks good. I'd personally use more bullet points and less prose. An employer looking at 50 applications isn't going to read through all of those paragraphs. Also, in my opinion, writing 'C (B for AS)' comes across as if you could have done better and didn't step up to the mark. I'm not accusing you of this being the case, I just wouldn't give them that ammunition.
 
SpaghettiOs said:
Work experience and volunteering all looks good. I'd personally use more bullet points and less prose. An employer looking at 50 applications isn't going to read through all of those paragraphs. Also, in my opinion, writing 'C (B for AS)' comes across as if you could have done better and didn't step up to the mark. I'm not accusing you of this being the case, I just wouldn't give them that ammunition.
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My Mum went into hospital diagnosed with Parkinsons disease, so unfortunately my studies took a back seat. I was doing 3 A levels but due to personal commitments had to drop one.
Thanks for your help :)
 
yourbookbegins said:
My Mum went into hospital diagnosed with Parkinsons disease, so unfortunately my studies took a back seat. I was doing 3 A levels but due to personal commitments had to drop one.
Thanks for your help :)
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Sorry to hear that. As I said, I'm sure it wasn't the case that you didn't try your best. I'm just not sure an employer flicking through hundreds of applications would see it the same. :)
 
My advice would be to work on the layout.. make it look a bit more inviting, and less daunting.

There are plenty of example CV's out there, try copying a few of the layouts and see what fits best with your content.

I tend to stay away from lines also... so that means no big tables etc.
 
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Feels like it is spaced out too much, and looks almost like a piece of prose (email) the way it is layed out with standard paragraphs and bulletpoints. Much like mine looked after uni in fact. Try and make it a bit punchier. Looks like you have wide line spacing, and nothing in the Education section catches the eye, just a bunch of spaced out text.

have developed a good morning routine as a result of this job
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This bit worries me a little, rightly or wrong it makes me think "this person is a lazy student who thinks getting out of bed in the morning is worthy of a medal". Put something about the skills you've had to apply instead.

I am still settling into the role
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Hints at a lack of confidence - this may have been true when you wrote it but by the time people have read your CV we could be into August. Focus on what you have achieved, aside from youth work this is probably the most impressive part of your CV; pitch it correctly and it could help land you the internship.

Add something about the Promotions work you did in 2010 even if it is just a single line.
 
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