Advice with CV

Princey · 6 Apr 2006 at 20:52

I have decided that I really should start apply for jobs now. I have never written a CV before so could you have a read of the one I created below and give me advice on how it can be improved. Thanks in advance

James Prince
3 Hartside Close, Hayley Green
Halesowen, West Midlands, B63 1HP
Tel: (0121) XXXXXXX
[email protected]

PROFILE:

I am an IT graduate from Halesowen College who is keen to find a job within the IT industry has a thorough understanding of computer hardware and software. I am also keen to learn new skills. During work experience in year 11 high school, I spend a week with a Dell field service engineer. This helped me develop a broader understanding of IT fault finding and customer service. At college I studied a course called the BETC First Diploma in ICT.

EDUCATION:

Winter 2006 Expecting to complete the Cerco CCSN Fast Track Course

2003 – 2004 BTEC First Diploma in ICT at MERIT Grade at Halesowen College

Subjects Covered: Computer Hardware, Computer Systems, Database Management,
Website Development, Network Solutions, User Support and Business Applications.

EXPERIENCE:

Summer 2003 Laurence Hill Computer Engineer
Technical Assistant

This was a work experience placement for part of my Career Development Program. It
involved visiting customers around the West Midlands to repair their computers and
printers. If the system could not be fixed on site then the computer or printer would be
brought back to the base and fixed there. My duties including ordering parts, upgrading
computer systems and building systems to order.

PERSONAL DETAILS:

Date of Birth: 30/11/1986
Marital Status: Single
Drive Licence: Full UK, Clean

REFERENCES:

Tracy Cotton, McDonalds Restaurants LTD, Bromsgrove Road, Halesowen, West Midlands, B63 3JQ
Tel: (0121) 585 7555

w11tho · 6 Apr 2006 at 21:07

I think the term "graduate" might be a little misleading.

comradpoplin! · 6 Apr 2006 at 21:12

looks good to me good luck though hope you find what you whant

Ripper · 6 Apr 2006 at 21:15

why did you say that you did a BTEC national but not list it in your education? Also, its not exactly worth 3 A levels, might be better putting "the equivalent of"

Princey · 6 Apr 2006 at 21:19

Ripper^ said:
why did you say that you did a BTEC national but not list it in your education? Also, its not exactly worth 3 A levels, might be better putting "the equivalent of"

EDITED: I had to drop out the course for personal reasons.

Also I really would like to do an apprenticeship, how would I go about this?

Amleto · 7 Apr 2006 at 01:00

Princey said:
James Prince
3 Hartside Close, Hayley Green
Halesowen, West Midlands, B63 1HP
Tel: (0121) XXXXXXX
[email protected]

PROFILE:

I am an IT graduate from Halesowen College who is keen to find a job within the IT industry, and I have a thorough understanding of...
needs breaking into two sentences imo
...computer hardware and software. I am also keen to learn new skills. During mywork experience in year 11 high school, I spent a week with a Dell field service engineer. This helped me develop a broader understanding of IT fault finding and customer service. At college I obtained a BETC First Diploma in ICT.the details of the last sentence are mentioned elsewhere

Too many 'keen's. One is too many tbh

EDUCATION:

Winter 2006 Expecting to complete the Cerco CCSN Fast Track Course

2003 – 2004 BTEC First Diploma in ICT at MERIT Grade at Halesowen College

Subjects Covered: Computer Hardware, Computer Systems, Database Management,
Website Development, Network Solutions, User Support and Business Applications.

EXPERIENCE:

Summer 2003 Laurence Hill Computer Engineer
Technical Assistant

This was a work experience placement for part of my Career Development Program. It
involved visiting customers around the West Midlands to repair their computers and
printers. If the system could not be fixed on site then the computer or printer would be
brought back to the base and fixed there. My duties including ordering parts, upgrading
computer systems and building systems to order.

try and say what you brought to the role, not just a job description.

you have a profile, but nothing about 'you'

GCSE English?
GCSE Maths?