Can someone check my updated CV

I've had a look at this a it's presentation is good. However, there are some major flaws.

If you don't mind, I'll print this off and highlight the areas you need to address this afternoon. I'll then email you in the morning rather than blasting my comments over the forum.

:)
 
Dont put bad grades down, if they want to know what you got they will ask you.

KaHn
 
First things first:

Trim down your Education to about half the size it is currently. Get rid of your GCSE's as they will have been superceded by further education.

Also you don't need to have the phrase "Curriculum Vitae" at the top of your CV, your full name would be more appropriate.

Other than that, nice clean layout if a little "showy" for my tastes :)
 
KaHn said:
Dont put bad grades down, if they want to know what you got they will ask you.

KaHn
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I agree with KaHn here, just put 7 GCSEs or something similar, if they want your grades, they will ask :)
 
Admiral Huddy said:
I've had a look at this a it's presentation is good. However, there are some major flaws.

If you don't mind, I'll print this off and highlight the areas you need to address this afternoon. I'll then email you in the morning rather than blasting my comments over the forum.

:)
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bump - I won't do this unless you want me to.

;)
 
Quite posh, some good changes made. A few points:-

1. Only use one font on your CV, otherwise it looks messy. The headers in times new roman (bad) where the body text looks really nice (Verdana?)

2. I would have the order of headings: Personal statement (plus make it relevant to the job), Work History, Relevant Skills, Education, Hobbies and Interests.

3. There is too much space in the document for me. Have the headings at the same level as the start of the paragraph.

4. "Left School with 7 GCSE’s" - Just Put "7 GCSE's including Maths and English"

5. "The role of this course included a number of intense modules covering:" change to "During this course I became proficient in the following skill areas:"

6. No dates when you were doing your HND.

7. No mark on your HND, whereas you put 'Credit' and 'Distinction' on your C&G qualification. Did your HND go badly? (this is what an employer might think).

8. "High profound knowledge" - LOL Did you mean 'highly proficient in...'?

9. Really like the way you've written the employment history. :)

10. Ditch References, Summary (??) and don't mention computers in your hobbies (IMHO).

Other than that, I'd employ you :)
 
melbourne720 said:
Quite posh, some good changes made. A few points:-

1. Only use one font on your CV, otherwise it looks messy. The headers in times new roman (bad) where the body text looks really nice (Verdana?)

2. I would have the order of headings: Personal statement (plus make it relevant to the job), Work History, Relevant Skills, Education, Hobbies and Interests.

3. There is too much space in the document for me. Have the headings at the same level as the start of the paragraph.

4. "Left School with 7 GCSE’s" - Just Put "7 GCSE's including Maths and English"

5. "The role of this course included a number of intense modules covering:" change to "During this course I became proficient in the following skill areas:"

6. No dates when you were doing your HND.

7. No mark on your HND, whereas you put 'Credit' and 'Distinction' on your C&G qualification. Did your HND go badly? (this is what an employer might think).

8. "High profound knowledge" - LOL Did you mean 'highly proficient in...'?

9. Really like the way you've written the employment history. :)

10. Ditch References, Summary (??) and don't mention computers in your hobbies (IMHO).

Other than that, I'd employ you :)
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Thank you for your feedback, i will make the changes when i get home as im leaving the office now.

Im updating my CV to put on my new website, just adding the content and typing up the loose ends.
 
[Sniper][Wolf] said:
Thank you for your feedback, i will make the changes when i get home as im leaving the office now.

Im updating my CV to put on my new website, just adding the content and typing up the loose ends.
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No problem. I really like the layout on the whole, very pleasing to the eye.

Also you could put personal details on 1 line, centred in small text under your name:-

11 anystreet, anytown, any city, OC11 1UK
TEL: 020 8888 8888 Mob: 078 8888 8888 e-mail: [email protected]
 
Hi,

There's a lot of wasted space. Indent the descriptions more to the left. You've allocated too much space for the dates on the left. And its years, not yrs. :)
 
Get rid of the references. Put your job history above education. Personal statement needs improvement. Use more examples and less "I". Your CV MUST be 2 pages long.
 
Personal statement should be short and snappy, 1 or 2 short sentences are best, and modulated to the job you are applying for.

all important information should be on one page, indeed even just the top of the first page.

DOB is not needed, nor is NI.

Only list the 2 most relevant jobs for the job you are applying to.

Car owner/ clean driving license should not be at the top unless you are applying for a job that requires driving- otherwise who cares.

Don't put reference details down. It is rude on behalf of your referees to do this.

Lots of wasted space.

You haven't stated what languages you speak and at what abilities.

The hobbies and interests has some very bad English.
 
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