Can someone please Check my CV....

[OV3RCLOCK3R]

Hey all,

Can someone please check my cv and tell me if it's ok? I've made this on my own but am not sure if it's all ok or if i need to add anything else to it, Please post your suggestions on this thread and please be nice as it's my first time


CV

Thanks in advance

 

[Amleto]

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edit1:
profile

capital 'c' after a comma?

'can almost talk to anyone'. There are some people you can't talk to?

What does talking to almost anyone have to do with working in a team/unsupervised - nothing. Why are they in the same sentence?
edit: Thats a bit harsh, sorry. Of course you need to talk to people in the workplace, but being able to is nothing to brag about...


sentence2: ''I'm'' is used, but 'I am' was correctly used in the previous sentence.

Too short imo. Doesn't say anything about what you want to do. You need to say more about why you want to do 'it', and why you would be a good employee.

education
'I will be doing such subjects as...' needs to be re-worded. Just the qualification type, and course title would suffice.

work experience
you did your experience at 'Argos Warehouse'? Is there only one? If not, you need to choose your article more precisely. Probably warehouse shouldn't be capitalised. Were you 'involved' in working at the warehouse, or did you *actually* work there? Last sentence needs re-doing. Employers don't want a job-description, they want to know what you brought to the job - what makes you stand out?

something in 10 seconds...
I worked in an Argos warehouse where I needed to pick the items and deliver them to the shop tills for collection. I quickly learnt where items were, and passed my knowledge onto any new employees.
I'm sure it can be improved markedly

hobbies
Why is 'Sports' capitalised? Why is 'Cricket' capitalised? etc...
'...Socialising' '...Spending'


Try and include reasons why you like them, what characteristics in the games could help in the workplace? Teamwork? Perseverance? Self motivation?

interests
Why start with 'when it comes to interest'? Interest shoud be 'interests', but get rid of that part anyway.

Use 'I am', not I'm. Again with the capitalisation mid-sentence. Where on Earth did you learn that?

You troubleshoot computers? Maybe you 'have become skilled at trouble shooting common hardware and software computer problems'? Does this require you to recall past experiences? Does this require you to use your own initiative when solving problems?

hth

 

[BloodWolf]

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Yeah lol..

 

[Alex_L]

some quick thoughts:

/disclaimer
i haven't done a cv for a couple of years, so i wouldn't trust too much of what I say:

In general i'd try and make the text flow a bit more, and make sure that the spelling and grammar is 100% correct, as nothing worse than grammatical errors (there is one on the first line of your personal profile). I'd also try and use more formal language and style, as at the moment it comes across as bit informal for a cv.

Personal details:

There not all in a completely straight line down the page, picky but the first thing I noticed, might want to blank your phone numbers from this, otherwise you might be getting a lot of prank calls.

I am quite an outgoing person, Can almost talk to anyone and have the ability to work in a team and can also work unsupervised. I’m a very trustworthy person and also a very good time keeper.

I'd try rewriting that. At the moment, it doesn't flow or make a great deal of sense imo. I've had a quick go at rewriting the start (but i'm tired so wouldn't be too sure its much better )

I am an outgoing individual with good communication skills, making teamwork a particular strength.

Qualifications:

I'd go with one predicted grade for the gcse's, go for the most realistic.

Also just list the A-levels you will be doing in the same format as your GCSE's

Previous employment:

make sure the text is formatted properly, as it appears a bit bitty at the moment. I'd have a go at rewriting it.

My work experience involved working both within the warehouse and on the shop floor. My role in the warehouse included.............. (fill in with the main things you did). The role on the shop floor included .............. (fill in as appropriate). I throughly enjoyed this role and it helped me improve my skills, particularly dealing with customers.

Hobbies:

I'd cut out about socialising, as I don't think its relevant. Maybe go into a bit more detail on the sports, including any teams you play for (shows commitment etc)

References: I'd include what role they have eg tutor, teacher, deputy headteacher etc.

 

[semi-pro waster]

I'd also recommend removing name/address etc. I'd probably put the personal profile at the end but that might just be a personal thing.

I'd change the personal profile to read more like "I am confident and outgoing, I work well in a team or individually as required. I am conscientious and punctual.". Maybe bullet-point it.

For education I'd include the addess of the school(s) that you have attended and as soon as your grades are finalised you should obviously update them.

For your work experience can you think of any occasions where you displayed initiative etc that you could list, you might also find it good to focus on achievements - past tense i.e. 'I delivered goods' rather than 'I was delivering'.

I'm not sure you need to include socialising in hobbies as pretty much everyone enjoys socialising to some degree and I wouldn't spell it out for the reader either No need to capitalise sports, maybe mix up word choice so you enjoy listening to music rather than using like in two successive sentences.

I wouldn't start off with your interests with "When it comes to interests....", your heading tells the reader that it is about your interests. I'd maybe also re-write the interests as the sentences seem a little unwieldy to me. Hobbies and interests section you might be able to combine into one. You could also include if you are learning to drive/have learnt to drive.

Sorry if it sounds like I'm being very critical, it isn't easy to write a good CV, I know mine isn't but I've tried to improve it recently and this is some advice I have been given.

 

[dirtydog]

make sure the text is formatted properly, as it appears a bit bitty at the moment.

I second that. He appears to have used loads of single spaces to align the text, rather than tab spaces.