Career Objective for a CV

Goodie · 6 Mar 2011 at 19:24

Hi folks!

Im working on updating my CV, well I say updating but infact its going to end up being a complete re-write as I havent touched it in about 6 years. Im really struggling with my personal statement though. At present all I've got is

A Coaching and Sports Development graduate with an extensive knowledge of training principles, periodisation training for elite athletes and the role of nutrition in enhancing athletic performance. Seeks a challenging position in which I am able to put my learned knowledge to use in a practical environment.

It just doesnt seem good enough. Writing things such as CV's is something that I really struggle to do. So I'm just wondering if there are a few friendly folks around here that could help me out a little bit with the things that I should be aiming to include.

Would it sound better/be acceptable to describe myself as a 'Exercise and Nutrition Science post graduate student' or should I leave it as a 'Coaching and Sports Development graduate'?

Marshstyles · 6 Mar 2011 at 19:47

i had to write a CV for myself a couple of weeks ago and i too umed and ahhed about what to put for my profile/personal statement.

i put this:

"A qualified plumber with 5 years experience in both domestic and commercial properties. Reliable and hard working with the ability to work well unsupervised or as part of a team. Quick to learn new skills, now looking for a challenging and rewarding position in the plumbing industry."

here is the job centre plus help page on CV's. the personal statement is 3 paragraphs down with some examples. TBH mine is just a combination of a few of them.

https://nextstep.direct.gov.uk/gett...gs/Pages/CreateaCVHelp.aspx#personalstatement

hope this helps

Goodie · 6 Mar 2011 at 19:58

Thanks Marsh

Ill go have a read to see what they say

Mr^B · 6 Mar 2011 at 21:18

Just the usual comment about switching from 3rd person to 1st person and back again.

A Coaching and Sports Development graduate with an extensive knowledge of training principles, periodisation training for elite athletes and the role of nutrition in enhancing athletic performance. Seeking a challenging position in which they are able to put their learned knowledge to use in a practical environment.

Goodie · 6 Mar 2011 at 21:27

Ive spent a few hours tweaking and rewording and im currently at

As a Coaching and Sports Development graduate with an extensive knowledge of training principles for athletes at the highest level, and the role of nutrition in enhancing athletic performance, I aim to put this to practical use in a position that offers challenges and opportunities for growth.

Mr^B · 6 Mar 2011 at 22:32

That doesn't really make sense.

"As a Coaching and Sports Development graduate [...] I aim to put this to practical use in a position that offers challenges and opportunities for growth."

Is how it reads. It's too long and fragmented. Do you really have an "extensive" knowledge? You've only just graduated, how much knowledge will you have in 20 years time? What's greater that "extensive"?

Here's a quick guide that seems reasonably written:

http://careers.guardian.co.uk/careers-blog/how-to-write-a-personal-statement-for-your-cv