Could you please take a look at my CV?

Im no cv expert but id say its too spaced out and you need something else in expericence, whether its something you built like a website or an achievement.
an employer may look at it and say something on the lines of "experience, ooohh, mcdonalds" -bin- (sorry)
 
You say you given an important role, at some fast food place - ie:McDonalds, urger King, Subway. But none of the roles listed seem that important to me - just general duties, which you'd be expected to do at work.

I'd look at making more use of your space. I'm sure your potential employer would rather look at one page crammed with useful information, opposed to two pages of fluff.
 
It seems rather spaced out to me. Avoiding clutter is good but you could probably fit that lot onto one page.

Did you not study Science, Geography or History? :/

The important role you mention under Experience isn't immediately obvious. They seem general duties to me.
 
Looks like you are trying to be too clever with the layout. Bunch it up to 1 page and leave it at that. At your age you have very little to put on a CV, it really is pointless spreading it accross 2 pages. Grammar is appauling as well.
 
What role are you looking at applying for? Might be a way of tailoring it to your market, at the moment it's very bland and rather low-end.
 
Further nit picking.

You've got title called Awards - not Award, but Awards. In this section, there is only one award listed.

In the second last paragraph, you put across a strong impression that IT is going to be the only career you will consider. I think you'll have a hard time applying for non-IT role, and when they ask "you mention you have a strong passion for IT, and you wish to pursue it. What has brought you to apply for this non-IT role?"

Nobody is bothered what sports you do in you spare time. Tell them you like playing sports, and be done with it. If they want to know more, they'll ask.

When writing a CV, remember you want to give the employer a chance to ask questions - so try not to be so specific. If they're interested in you, they'll invite you along for an interview, and ask you - giving you a better chance to get the job.
 
In your work experience, they couldn't give a damn about the job description - what made *you* stick out in that job?

As previously said, that sentence about physical/oral comms sounds really weird.
 
Note: don't forget that you should tailor your CV for every application. This one looks good for an IT role but would have to be re-written for another role.
 
Looks good if they're after someone to socialise with.

Seriously don't include things like "I enjoy socialising with friends".

It's obvious and doesn't add anything. Also there's a lot of white space. It could be condensed considerably.
 
I love you guys, very critical (Which was what I was looking for!) and hopefully I'll post my second version up in the evening :)

I'm applying for 4 different jobs:

1) B&Q
2) Gap
3) Lacoste
4) House of fraser (Tommy Hilfiger dept)
 
dark_shadow said:
I love you guys, very critical (Which was what I was looking for!) and hopefully I'll post my second version up in the evening :)

I'm applying for 4 different jobs:

1) B&Q
2) Gap
3) Lacoste
4) House of fraser (Tommy Hilfiger dept)
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so since you are applying for retail jobs, perhaps include a line at the top stating that before you gi into the details.

remeber to make a point about yourself (a keen and committed individual rather than i am a keen .....) and then back it up with evidence.
 
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