Help me with my cv

cymatty

cymatty

cymatty

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12/10/1983 Nationality (British)

Personal Profile
After completing my degree I moved onto the graduate Scheme for HSBC as a Trainee Commercial manager this job has given me valuable skills, which can be transferred to a wide variety of jobs and roles.

Education and Qualifications

2003/07 University of Huddersfield
BA (Hons) Accounting and Finance 2:2


2001/03 The Oldham College
NVQ 3 NVQ 4 Accounting

2000/01 Our Lady’s RC High Sixth Form
Music and Business Studies Grade C

1995/00 Our Lady’s RC High School
7 GCSEs (A-C) including Maths and English

Work Experience

2007-Present HSBC Graduate Scheme (Trainee Commercial Manager)
Working with high value business customers to meet their needs and demands. Working in a team organising a charity ball in Manchester to raise £100,000 for various charities.

2003/07 Portable Appliance Tester (Self employed sub contractor)
Working with a small team to carry out electrical safety tests on items at various locations.

1999/04 McDonalds Restaurants (Floor Manager)
Leading a team of people to achieve a common goal, this role also involved me training mew members of staff and developing existing staff

Skills

All my previous roles have given me skills in which I have been able to carry forward to the next role. These include working as part of a team either as its leader, or team member. I also have the ability to work by myself and be very self motivated. I also enjoy problem solving and finding ways to improve existing ideas or procedures.
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Having never had to complete a CV, I was just wondering if this is ok?

I know there are personal info and reference sections missing, I will add those later.

Oh if it helps I am looking for a management job

Thanks.:)
 
Your personal profile doesn't really sell yourself, you don't stand out from the get go, I'd want to change that.

The dates are a bit confusing as 2003/07 and should really be 2003-07.

Add another sentence or two to what you gained from your work experience, again selling yourself.

Got any hobbies that back up any claims? Do you do anything outside of work currently (again like hobbies) or activities? got a clean driving license?
 
RandomTom said:
Your personal profile doesn't really sell yourself, you don't stand out from the get go, I'd want to change that.

The dates are a bit confusing as 2003/07 and should really be 2003-07.

Add another sentence or two to what you gained from your work experience, again selling yourself.

Got any hobbies that back up any claims? Do you do anything outside of work currently (again like hobbies) or activities? got a clean driving license?
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I enjoy cars and photgraphy, I organinsed all the manchester motors meets on this forum for example and I attend lots of motoring events. :)

I dont have any webspace to host the document. :(
 
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Off topic but I see you're doing the same course as I plan on doing in September - at a different uni mind. Was it enjoyable if you don't mind me asking?
 
RandomTom said:
Your personal profile doesn't really sell yourself, you don't stand out from the get go, I'd want to change that.
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What about if I change the first bit to

After completing my degree I moved onto the graduate Scheme for HSBC as a Trainee Commercial manager, one of only 30 such positions in the UK this job has given me valuable skills, which can be transferred to a wide variety of jobs and roles.
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Is that selling myself better?:)
 
lie as in abit better than what you have achieved.not that you piloted the apollo 13 to the moon.keep it believable and they will believe you.i have not been to a interview where this has not happened.
 
markyp23 said:
Put more about your duties in your jobs. Far too short at the moment but don't go over 2 pages they say.
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Yeah true, do you think it worth putting that I am designing and implementing an electronic diary system for four commercial centres?

Oh and I will remove the brackets.:)
 
Remove that you're British, doesn't need to be on there at all.

Also, I put a bit more about the key areas of your degree ie; what the main areas were that you covered? You were there for 3 years so might be an idea to put a bit more about it. I would also but what grades you got in maths and english at GCSE eg

7 GCSEs (A-C) including, Mathematics B; English B.

One line is definitely not enough about your current job. I would look to have about 4-5 bullet pointed sentences and try to intergrate with what you have done and what skills you learned/developed. You may have a lot of transferable skills but they're not much good if you can't get them across in your CV and tell prospective employers how they can be of use to them and what you can bring to their company.

As said above, make the dates a bit clearer also. Include months aswell as year for your jobs, education so you get 'September 2001- June 2003 The Oldham College', only a minor point but it makes it easier to track your history.
 
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