How is my Curriculum Vitae?

very nice, all the info is there, but I would put line breaks in between sections, as It looks like an essay. Makes it look like manageable chunks then.

A fellow student also looking for summer work? Im waiting to hear back from a bike shop

edit: by line breaks I mean actual lines like double borders
 
I like this, not too long.
Some peoples ive seen are like 5 pages long, its just way too much to comprehend.
Agree with brookert though space it out abit :D
 
You've used a generic template and your grammar and spelling is iffy at best.

You don't need to take up nearly a page describing what a cashier does and what you have learned from it. Also, swap your education with your experience so that education comes first. Add in a skills section and beef up your Interests. Ditch Future and Present Ambitions as, apart from being terribly hard to comprehend, it adds nothing of value other than filler content.

In fact, you know what? Scrap it and start again. Use a template from one of the several thousand that are available online but choose a good one. Try and add some flair, some personality to it but keep it professional. Get someone else to proof read it before you send it for grammar, syntax and spelling errors.

Good luck.

e : just read the above two replies saying that your CV is good. It is not. If you'd sent this to me it would have gone in the bin after 20 seconds of reading.
 
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Just having a little nose now. Mainly for ideas on how to do my own CV.

The way my work is going at the minute I fear I will need it!!
 
Don't start a CV with I, and in general writing in the third person improves CVs.

Spelling and grammar errors in the profile would mean I would drop it in the bin.

General presentation errors, misaligned text, unjustified text, missing line spaces.

You don't say where you are studying currently and your previous school.
Who cares about GCSEs

You should list interests and hobbies that may be beneficial to your work, or improve your persona. E.g., done any charity work?


For your work at a checkout you have listed a lot of redundant, superfluous and repeated entries. This whole entry could be done in 2-3 lines


List any awards and prizes that you have won.
 
cheers for all the great replies will have a go at editing it. Some of the grammer mistakes in the top line were just from quickly deleting things to display on here
 
Too much space taken up with your contact details. That's several lines about you wasted.

Switch education to the top.

Don't spend too much time on your key responsibilities and what you've learnt/achieved from the job. Keep it more concise and choose the features which are going to be more applicable to the job you're applying for.

Take out future and present ambitions as stated. Expand on any achievments in your interests and hobbies.

Try and put at least one reference in there to begin with. An employer isn't always going to want to have to spend their time chasing you up to get the contact details of a referee, because the chances are you wont have those details that day and he will be wanting to send out appointments for interviews that day.


I have successfully completed my first year at University studying.
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I'd be thinking, "Yeah, so what? That could mean you got 45% for all I know."

I am looking for a seasonal employment position within your company.
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Very generic, they will spot this is a template immediately.

I am highly motivated, reliable and capable and have experience of working in a demanding retail environment.
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The first half of the sentence doesn't really link in correctly with the second half. Reads almost like you've written the first bit and come back to it two hours later thinking you just want to express that you're experienced in retail.

I am a Customer oriented employee who is both trusts worthy, honest, flexible and able to develop strong team relationships
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Not quite sure why customer has a capital C here and trustworthy is all one word.

As your opening paragraph to your CV I wouldn't be thrilled having read that.
 
Thanks for taking the time to read it J-FRO and give some feedback.

Would this be a better opening paragraph:

I just successfully finished my first year at university with a projected grade of 67% (not included but don't find result out till late june). I have seen an opportunity within your company and would very much like to be the employee who fulfills that vacancy. I feel my customer orientated outgoing personality would be a great contribution and assets to your team. I am a well motivated and flexible employee who loves working in a demanding retail environment where working to targets and deadlines is paramount.
 
I don't think the presentation looks that great to be honest, with that little information you could easily cut it down to one page. My CV has eleven jobs on it and only spans two pages.

Instead of using three separate lines, just write the job title and info as follows - bosses can tell that it's your job title, company name and date:

Admin Assistant, Tescos, Basingstoke, 12/08 - 01/09

Have a read of this: http://money.usnews.com/money/careers/slideshows/9-tips-to-make-your-resume-stand-out.

Also have you proof read it? I'm not too sure what 'trusts worthy' is. I'd also get rid of the line 'I am looking for aseasonal employment position within your company.' as that's what your cover letter is for. You also shouldn't have 'Company' for your second job on the bottom of page 1, use a page break.

You should change the whole thing to the same tense (preferably past tense active - i.e. 'trained' 'was responsible for' etc.).

It's also not specific enough. You say you 'training others' - other what, how many and what in? It's far more powerful to say 'trained 5 junior members of staff in finance protocol and customer service'. You should put stock loss 'hero' in inverted commas, as I'm assuming it's a title? You've also listed handling money twice. Also try to fold 'what I have learned' into the responsibilities section to avoid further repetition.

For Education - you need to actually list the names of your university and college. i.e. BACHELOR OF ARTS IN POLITICS, FIRST CLASS HONORS – University of Nottingham – July 2009

Ditch the future ambitions and references sections - if you want to get that across put it in the cover letter. The sentence 'I am interested in outdoor activities and competitive game situation below is a few of my favorite interests' isn't great. Should be 'below are' and I don't know what 'competitive game situation' is meant to me. Favourite should be spelt favoUrite in this country.
 
Thanks for feedback after reading what you put and looking at my cv can totally see where you are coming from and it is very weak.

I shall edit it and post up my new cv tonight. I have chosen a new template that breaks the cv down into individual sections and looks a lot neater.
 
This is how I'd write these two sections, If indeed I were putting them in my CV :)

Interests and Hobbies:
I am interested in outdoor activities and competitive sports, below are a few of my favourite interests

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*

Present and Future Ambitions:
I aim to finish my University degree and believe this will help in preparing me for the challenges of the working environment, I hope to join a firm in which I can build a successful and enjoyable career.
 
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I don't have a template to hand, But I would definitely try and fit the marathon in your CV somewhere. As it looks impressive, I remember an interview I went to where I spent most of it talking about my hobbies rather than my qualification or work experience, because that's what the guy wanted to talk about!
 
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I don't have a template to hand, But I would definitely try and fit the marathon in your CV somewhere. As it looks impressive, I remember an interview I went to where I spent most of it talking about my hobbies rather than my qualification or work experience, because that's what the guy wanted to talk about!
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alright thanks will include that in there.

Would any of these be good

Like CV1
 
I concur with the one page CV being best for you.

The "Interests and Hobbies" section should be a comma separated list so it fits on 2 lines.

Your "Future and present Ambitions" section should be removed - put that stuff in under your Introduction/Profile heading.
 
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