New song about to record any thoughts welcome. Split-screen video

[Muso1070]

Just finished a new song and did a little split screen live video for it.
Would be great to hear any feedback before I go about recording the studio version.
Thanks

 

[Junglist]

Not my type of music but you're clearly very talented! I can just about play a triangle!

 

[Muso1070]

Not my type of music but you're clearly very talented! I can just about play a triangle!

Haha the triangle sounds great in a song if used right
Thanks for checking it out.

 

[Muso1070]

Lyrics

I've been thinking, It could be time
Build a wood house, Cedar, Oak and Pine
Fix the land up follow our dreams
Oh the sweetest thoughts, this is what I see

Cause I'm waiting on the Sun
If we plan It our day will come
It just takes time on the curve
So we're waiting, waiting on the Sun

You've been thinking the timings right
Chase the feeling that grows inside
Close an old door for a new life
Oh with a glimmer of hope, set this thing alight

Cause you're waiting on the Sun
If we plan It our day will come
It just takes time on the curve
So we're waiting, waiting on the Sun

Instrumental
Oh.... Oh....Oh... waiting ...
Oh.... Oh....Oh... waiting ...

I've been thinking, It could be time
Build a wood house, Cedar, Oak and Pine
Fix the land up follow our dreams
Oh the sweetest thoughts, this is what I see

 

[a1ex2001]

I like it looking forward to hearing a studio version the vocal was a little lost in that mix for me.

 

[Screenbeat]

Awesome! Very bloody good!!!!

Bit of the phonics about you but thats not a bad thing in my eyes!!

Get it recorded and send me a copy please

 

[Muso1070]

I like it looking forward to hearing a studio version the vocal was a little lost in that mix for me.

Hey thank you. 100% the vocal a little lower in the mix than Id like but it was down to it being live with out mic's just the cam phone mic.
Good to hear you enjoyed thanks.

 

[Muso1070]

Awesome! Very bloody good!!!!

Bit of the phonics about you but thats not a bad thing in my eyes!!

Get it recorded and send me a copy please

Thanks for the kind words, that's definitely a big compliment to be compared to the phonics cheers recording soon