Ucas personal statement help

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Hi,

I'm in the process or writing my personal statement but have never been very good writing about myself. Can anyone give me any pointers on the following please? Im applying for an engineering degree

From a young age I was always fascinated about how and why things work. I would spend hours dismantling my toys or playing with Lego to turn my ideas into reality. As I grew older I discovered I had a keen interest in sciences, particularly Physics which help in my understanding of how and why things work.

The desire to apply theory to real life situations allowed me to thoroughly enjoy the mechanics module of A level Mathematics, as well as the mechanics and theory involved in A level Physics. While Mathematics and physics are the main background skills needed for engineering, the increasing importance of computers means skills learnt during my I.C.T. A-level would be of great use during a career in engineering.

Rugby and an active social life have been carefully my academic studies for school. I have captained my local club team as well as playing for my school. In addition to this I also assist coach mini rugby at my local club, completing several coaching workshops. This has helped me discover I have a talent for leadership and help improve my time management which will be vital for succeeding in a tough university course.

To complement my academic and sporting life I have completed my Duke of Edinburgh Silver award and am currently completing the Duke of Edinburgh Gold ward. These gave me a chance to undertake many new challenges and frequently allowed be to deal with unusual predicaments and work with a wide variety of people. It has also allowed me to help the local community which I have continued to do, doing volunteer work at a local animal sanctuary and coaching mini rugby.

Also should include anythign about my work expirience with the army or that im travelling asia for 2 months over summer? Will write a ending paragraph once ive sorted the rest out.

Thanks rhys
 
You might want to include some books relating to the subject that you have read and how they possibly influenced your opinion. If you have done any work experience relating to your chosen degree include it also.

Isn't it a bit late to be applying? I thought the deadline was back in January sometime?

Yea its very late to be applying but ive given the unis im applying to a call and they said they happy to receive a late application.

Unfortuently havent done any work experience relevant but ill add a couple books to it. Thanks
 
brillant thanks for the help

edit: It was supposed to be done ages ago but i had no plans on going to uni. Things have changed over the last few months so have decided ill apply and see what happens. Got nothing better to do with my time since i lost my job anyway
 
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hows the p.s going?

Think ive just finished it now, change quite a lot from the first draft. This is it:

The helicopter and fixed wing flying lessons I received for my 18th birthday confirmed my passion in the mechanics of flight. When I was younger I would spend hours building model planes from Lego or kits. These were great fun – but they didn’t fly. I was driven to know what made them seemingly defy the Laws of Nature. I read anything about planes and helicopters I could lay my hands on, and then built my own remote-controlled aircraft.

As my fascination extended to the increasingly sophisticated computers that control modern-day flight, I became frustrated by the lack of speed of our family computer, and used my own savings to build my own computer from scratch. I still remember the sense of achievement when I hit the Power button for the first time and the computer sprang to life.

It was perhaps the desire to apply theory to real life situations that meant I enjoyed the mechanics module of A-level Mathematics, as well as the mechanics and theory in A-level Physics. Physics has always been one of my strongest subjects as it allows me to exercise my inquisitive nature. I naturally enjoy learning and applying science, both proven and theoretical, to problems and how it can be used to explain the workings of the world around us. While mathematics and physics are the main background skills needed for engineering, the increasing importance of computers means that skills learned during my I.C.T. A-level will be essential during a career in engineering.

I was appointed as a Prefect in my final year in senior school, and throughout, my studies have been carefully balanced with rugby and an active social life to ensure I got the most of my school years.

I loved the discipline and controlled aggression of Rugby, as well as the camaraderie of playing as part of a team. As well as turning out in the A-team for my school, I have captained my local club. Keen to share my own love of the game with those younger than me, including my own young cousin, I volunteered to assist coaching mini rugby at my local club. Sometimes, on a cold wet Sunday afternoon, there are a hundred other places I would rather be, but seeing the fun the kids have makes it all worthwhile. My desire to improve my skills has resulted in the completion of several coaching workshops, and plans to complete a Level 1 Certificate in Coaching Rugby Union.

I feel this demonstrates a strong desire and ability to lead, and a desire to throw myself at a challenge and improve my performance. Finding time for all my extra-curricular activities in addition to my school work also meant I needed to improve my time management, which I believe will be vital for succeeding in a tough university course.

My love of a physical challenge has also led me to get involved in the Duke of Edinburgh Award Scheme. I have completed the Silver award and am in the process of completing the Gold. What surprised me is that in addition to the physical challenges I was expecting, the Scheme has given me the chance to deal with unusual predicaments and work with a variety of people in the local community, including my volunteer work at a local animal sanctuary.

I feel that I am getting closer to my childhood dream of understanding how things fly, and hope to discover how modern materials, techniques and computers will make them fly higher, faster and safer.

I also know that, after the thrill of my first experience flying a helicopter and feeling it respond to my control that, whatever happens, it will not be my last.

Any advice would be great thanks :)
 
Hey,

Thanks for the help everyone, though i would update this. I got 5 unconditional offers, will probably be accepting Aeronautical Engineering at loughborough. Got until 5th of July to decide.

thanks
 
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