Yet another CV critique request...

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Please take a look, and tell me all the problems with this, this is basically a first draft. I've not had to do one in over 5 years...infact i've never had to do one! All my previous jobs have had application forms :p

So here we go:
https://rapidshare.com/files/4256257076/CV_template.doc

I know the current employment bit currently chops off in the middle of one job, i do plan on changing that bit....and before he comes in and says it, yes someone on here i did steal your personal profile sentences and just chopped a bit of the end :p i thought it was good enough to use so please don't hate :D

I think mainly what i'm looking for is advice on the following:
People in similar jobs to the one i'm currently in, technical skills, anything i should add to that? (I'm thinking i may have left something basic off)

Key skills, is that enough? Are they good enough?

Should i change the personal profile at all?

Is it wrong of me to have key achievements under my current employment as well as technical skills as they're very similar?

Thanks for any advice, feel free to be as brutal as you like.
 
Thank you D.P some sound advice :) I'll modify it this evening and then reupload, hangtime do you think perhaps another word is best substituted in place of articulate? I was thinking dependable or dedicated could be put there instead.
 
I've taken some advice in to consideration, gone away and changed it a bit, though i think i'm not happy with it and think you'll probably say the same:
https://rapidshare.com/files/2869192797/CV_template_new.doc

I wanted to try that LaTeX program, but sadly on my internet connection downloading 1.1GB would take far too long and 2 other people use this internet connection so i just tried to make it a bit more interesting to look at

I've changed the hobbies (should not from my link i changed the hobby of "gaming" to "team based gaming" as it is... but in my link that change isn't made)

I've made the technical skills a bit more interesting, rather than just a buzz word i've put a bit more depth in to each one, and the technical skills by the way are very much directed at what the job i'm going for is! including the key achievements section, they're all relevant to the job being advertised.

Finally i've changed around the key skills a bit, still just using key words but words that i think have a bit more behind them, let me know if i need to change this though.

Again all criticism is welcome and appreciated :)
 
p4radox said:
I'd put employment education before the rest of it. The important stuff should go first.

"Competent in both numerate and literate skills" sounds really bad :p. In plain English, you're basically saying "I'm numerate Numerate and literate" which everyone should be really - I'd leave it out.

You've put "on own initiative or as part of a team" three times. Maybe try to re-word it.
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Would simply changing it to "Good numerate and literate skills" sound better?

Can't think of what to change for the responsibilities/description of the two **** jobs :p can't think of anything i can put that's really relevant to my application for a new job, any help there?

Gustov - sent a message to your trust

Thank you everyone :)
 
Cheers Gustov and will do, your CV now throws up one important question though, no personal profile type section?

Looks very good though, i keep seeing so many nice CVs that make me think "maybe i should do it this way" and then another one comes along and makes me want to do it another way, it's all so confusing! :(
 
Quick question...

The job i'm applying for is through an agency, the online submission form for your CV etc has section titled "Supporting comments" .... hate to sound stupid but what exactly are they expecting in this box?

EDIT: also cover letter....as it's through an agency, i have the name of the agency consultant but not an individual within the company i'm applying to, should i start it with the name of the agency consultant or ring them tomorrow and see if i can get a name?
 
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Thank you sldsmkd, i've gone back and added a bit of the personal profile, hopefully it makes it slightly more interesting though i haven't exactly made a huge change to it.

Competent has been replaced

I'm unsure on your advice regarding the technical skills section, some people have said making it too basic isn't giving enough information, while others agree with you, seems 50/50 in that respect

changed hobbies to better the job I'm applying for :)

As always, thank you for the input, and for the explanation on the supporting comments field
 
Right i thought i had applied too late but the jobs been reopened, most likely the first batch of people they interviewed didn't cut the mustard.

Guy at the agency told me that my CV will be going to a HR manager who will undoubtedly know nothing about the technical section of the CV and will probably be looking for buzz words, can anyone recommend me some change too make regarding this piece of advice? I guess i need to make myself sound as interesting as possible now....
 
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