My CV, help from the more mature eya of the forum please.
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Lose the tables they look rubbish, cut it down to 2 pages, and it needs to be more straight to the point with less padding, never send the same C.V twice ALWAYS tailor it to the job you are applying for
Surely that's what a covering letter is for?
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This is an absolutely awful CV.
Here are a few things which stood out:
-You were born in 1989, so cut the CV down to 1 page.
-Cut out crap like the 'personal profile' and 'closing comments' which should be in a covering letter, not the CV.
-'As you can see I have done a lot of work, either paid or voluntary' should be
'As you can see I have done a lot of work, both paid and voluntary'
-You said 'please do not hesitate to contact me' four times in consecutive sentences.
-'I feel that I will come across better face to face' - this sounds awful.
-'The people I worked with, they were not the kind of people that were easy to work with.' makes you sound like you're the problem and that you can't adapt to new situations.
-'I had to leave as I was moving back to Bradford to live with my mum.' - Not needed.
-Personal information can easily be compressed into 3/4 lines.
-'I hate not doing things as I feel I should do something productive everyday.' - Sounds awful.
-Get rid of 'Key skills'. You have just listed a bunch of buzzwords that anyone could have put down.
-'I work on average 35-40 hours.' - Per day? Per year?
-Don't bother mentioning sports you haven't actually started yet.
In conclusion, a ****ing awful CV.
Here are a few things which stood out:
-You were born in 1989, so cut the CV down to 1 page.
-Cut out crap like the 'personal profile' and 'closing comments' which should be in a covering letter, not the CV.
-'As you can see I have done a lot of work, either paid or voluntary' should be
'As you can see I have done a lot of work, both paid and voluntary'
-You said 'please do not hesitate to contact me' four times in consecutive sentences.
-'I feel that I will come across better face to face' - this sounds awful.
-'The people I worked with, they were not the kind of people that were easy to work with.' makes you sound like you're the problem and that you can't adapt to new situations.
-'I had to leave as I was moving back to Bradford to live with my mum.' - Not needed.
-Personal information can easily be compressed into 3/4 lines.
-'I hate not doing things as I feel I should do something productive everyday.' - Sounds awful.
-Get rid of 'Key skills'. You have just listed a bunch of buzzwords that anyone could have put down.
-'I work on average 35-40 hours.' - Per day? Per year?
-Don't bother mentioning sports you haven't actually started yet.
In conclusion, a ****ing awful CV.
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Why don't you say what you really mean? Come on now, dont hold back.
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Hi mate,
http://files-upload.com/files/607423/CV Example.doc
This is a CV i made a couple of years ago, it may not be perfect but it was generally well received so feel free to use it as a template.
http://files-upload.com/files/607423/CV Example.doc
This is a CV i made a couple of years ago, it may not be perfect but it was generally well received so feel free to use it as a template.
He is speaking the truth tbh.
Far too much waffle and stick to 2 pages max. Only put down relevant work experience and not every bit of work you have ever done.
Key skills should be YOUR key skills, maybe 5 or so with a little explanation and an example, not just writing words like trustworthy, hardworker, always on time etc etc.
Remove the whole closing comments, and do a search on the web for s and covering letters. Tailor them for individual jobs too.
My maths skills are brilliant, the problem is when i moved to devon for year 11 my old school wouldnt send my new school any info so my school wernt willing to allow me to move up to a higher clss, therefore the highest grade possible was a D and i gained full marks...
Im currently in the process of waiting for an interview to resit it back up her ein bradford.
Cheers for the advice, i really appreciate it, and a lot of what you said is true, very amaturish, very poorly presented and my grammar is appauling...
Ill edit it, take things out, add things in, a lot of advice from Bar which i appreciate.
Cheers lads,
James.
Im currently in the process of waiting for an interview to resit it back up her ein bradford.
Cheers for the advice, i really appreciate it, and a lot of what you said is true, very amaturish, very poorly presented and my grammar is appauling...
Ill edit it, take things out, add things in, a lot of advice from Bar which i appreciate.
Cheers lads,
James.
"Didn’t like the job, it wasn’t what I wanted to do long term. The people I worked with, they were not the kind of people that were easy to work with".
10/10 for honesty, big fat 0 for team skills, working with people, motivation. If you cannot say something positive don't say anything. Saying 'I left for a job with greater responsibility and diversity' would also do, even if this is multiple spherical objects.
I hope you haven't picked up to much of west country accent its bad enough being understood in Keighley when you are only live 15 miles away.
10/10 for honesty, big fat 0 for team skills, working with people, motivation. If you cannot say something positive don't say anything. Saying 'I left for a job with greater responsibility and diversity' would also do, even if this is multiple spherical objects.
I hope you haven't picked up to much of west country accent its bad enough being understood in Keighley when you are only live 15 miles away.
I hope you haven't picked up to much of west country accent its bad enough being understood in Keighley when you are only live 15 miles away.
Lol! I brought some of it back, well not the accent, some of the words, i pronounce my words a lot clearer and better, i use smarter words and i talk a lot better than i used to...
Okay, updated it now, its not perfect but im sur eyoull agree its a lot better.
Ive taken quite a bit of your advice into consideration, searched the thread while i edited my cv...
check it out again,
cheers,
James.
EDIT: - link taken out.
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cv should be two pages max
for the less important older jobs, just put a very brief description, i wouldn't use the tables/boxes in your cv either, and remove any negatives (like saying you left a job because you didn't like it)
here's a screenshot of mine, it's far from perfect, but my sister works in a hr department and she helped me structure it..
scrubbed out my address,email,phone from the top
change the font to tahoma
for the less important older jobs, just put a very brief description, i wouldn't use the tables/boxes in your cv either, and remove any negatives (like saying you left a job because you didn't like it)
here's a screenshot of mine, it's far from perfect, but my sister works in a hr department and she helped me structure it..
scrubbed out my address,email,phone from the top
change the font to tahoma
Okay ive messed around with the fonts and now gotton it down to tahoma size 10 wich fits onto 2 pages..
http://www.mediafire.com/?bj2otmrwmib
http://www.mediafire.com/?bj2otmrwmib
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Wooops, cheers for that one..
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I love this bit,
'Confidence (not to be confused with arrogance)'
hahahahahahahhahaa.
Seriously your CV is still awful.
'Confidence (not to be confused with arrogance)'
hahahahahahahhahaa.
Seriously your CV is still awful.
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Get rid of the personal statement, get rid of the closing comment, get rid of GCSE grades, get rid of 'key skills'. The list goes on.....
A CV should really just be an outline of who you are in terms in work experience and education level without the clutter. No employer is going to read the whole of your CV. Save the talking up for the cover letter and interview.
You're less than 20, it should be one page max.
A CV should really just be an outline of who you are in terms in work experience and education level without the clutter. No employer is going to read the whole of your CV. Save the talking up for the cover letter and interview.
You're less than 20, it should be one page max.
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Generally your use of English seems good, it's more the choice of what you've said and how you've laid it out could do with some improvement.
1. Make your personal details smaller than the rest of the text.
2. Lose the last sentence of your personal profile (Im am flexible when it comes to travelling and I am unable to work on Thursday evenings due to college (7pm-9pm).), you can bring it up at the interview if necessary. Remember your grammar, it is [I'm] rather than [Im].
3. Lose the boxes. All of them.
4. Why have 'My Skills' then straight after it 'Key Skills'? No need for both and the formatting is wrong (the higher level (My Skills) should be more emphasized than the lower level).
5. Qualifications table looks bad. All you need is:-
I am currently working towards a Cisco System CCNA Training diploma/certification/whatever.
I have 5 GCSEs including Maths and English.
I have attended nationally recognised courses on Fire Safety, First Aid, Sports Leadership and [insert explanation for ASDAN - I thought it was the Lion from The Lion, The Witch and the Wardrobe]
6. No CV, no matter what the context, should ever use the word 'casual'.
7. Work History is good, if a little long winded. And either put it all in table format, or all in paragraphs. The mix-and-match approach looks untidy.
8. Put your sports and hobbies at the end in a separate section
9. Lose the letter-style closing comment at the end, apart from this: "Please do not hesitate to contact me on any extra information or references that you may need."
1. Make your personal details smaller than the rest of the text.
2. Lose the last sentence of your personal profile (Im am flexible when it comes to travelling and I am unable to work on Thursday evenings due to college (7pm-9pm).), you can bring it up at the interview if necessary. Remember your grammar, it is [I'm] rather than [Im].
3. Lose the boxes. All of them.
4. Why have 'My Skills' then straight after it 'Key Skills'? No need for both and the formatting is wrong (the higher level (My Skills) should be more emphasized than the lower level).
5. Qualifications table looks bad. All you need is:-
I am currently working towards a Cisco System CCNA Training diploma/certification/whatever.
I have 5 GCSEs including Maths and English.
I have attended nationally recognised courses on Fire Safety, First Aid, Sports Leadership and [insert explanation for ASDAN - I thought it was the Lion from The Lion, The Witch and the Wardrobe
]6. No CV, no matter what the context, should ever use the word 'casual'.
7. Work History is good, if a little long winded. And either put it all in table format, or all in paragraphs. The mix-and-match approach looks untidy.
8. Put your sports and hobbies at the end in a separate section
9. Lose the letter-style closing comment at the end, apart from this: "Please do not hesitate to contact me on any extra information or references that you may need."
