Can you help me correct a short sentence

[Ilikeitblackplease]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, I seek employment in Finance. There I can expand and make use of my skills gained from IT and Customer Services, within an investment bank.

 

[On Holiday]

Good luck!

 

[malfunkshun]

Perhaps 'help with a short thread title' should be first?

 

[wesley]

 

[Mr Badger]

I feel your pain.

And the countdown to thread closure ticks on...

 

[Uncle Petey]

That bunny clearly has two pancakes on it's head.

 

[dacads]

confused.com

 

[Ilikeitblackplease]

That bunny clearly has two pancakes on it's head.

Looks like a Taliban.

 

[malfunkshun]

Looks like a Taliban.

A Talibunny?

 

[Hitman_Leon]

Excellent, bilingual, chavish title and then a sentence in English that has no purpose. Maybe if you used a thread title written in English and then added more detail in what exactly you need done with the sentence in the first post someone could help.

 

[Edrof]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, I seek employment in Finance. There I can expand and make use of my skills gained from IT and Customer Services, within an investment bank.

I am confident that the kind of working environment offered by an investment bank is perfect for my wide range of IT and customer service skills. Aside from my great interest in finance, I am very highly motivated, dedicated and adaptable. My fellow Bronys have often admired my dogged tenacity when it comes to collecting all of the Ponies. Applejack is my favourite - she sure has some sass!

Hmm, maybe it would be better without that last couple of sentences.

 

[Curio]

Giz a job, m8

 

[JohnnyG]

Gis a job, I can do that.

 

[Ilikeitblackplease]

A Talibunny?

that's the one.

 

[Castiel]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, I seek employment in Finance. There I can expand and make use of my skills gained from IT and Customer Services, within an investment bank.

Coming from a highly motivated, dedicated and enthusiastic platform, I am an adaptable individual seeking employment in the finance sector where I can expand on and take full advantage of the skills gained in both the IT and Customer Service divisions within the Investment Banking Sector.


Is that what you meant?

 

[Tuppy_Glossop]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, I seek employment in Finance. There I can expand and make use of my skills gained from IT and Customer Services, within an investment bank.

I have few skills but want to earn lots of money. Finance seems to be the way forward.

 

[Ilikeitblackplease]

Coming from a highly motivated, dedicated and enthusiastic platform, I am an adaptable individual seeking employment in the finance sector where I can expand on and take full advantage of the skills gained in both the IT and Customer Service divisions within the Investment Banking Sector.


Is that what you meant?

yep something like that, thx. Changed it a bit but thx, head running out of steam.

 

[Josh]

My fellow Bronys have often admired my dogged tenacity when it comes to collecting all of the Ponies. Applejack is my favourite - she sure has some sass!

You owe me a new KB, just coughed coffee all over mine. Bravo

 

[Housey]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, I seek employment in Finance. There I can expand and make use of my skills gained from IT and Customer Services, within an investment bank.

Inspired to eat cheese and surrender like the very finest monkey, I have used cashpoints across EMEA and so many of those female/male words have stuck with me and I can speak d lingo. I seek employment in a place where I can put my odd moustache and soft headwear to use for the good of all people. Have own onions and striped shirts from my bank job...I mean work in banks.

 

[Slobbo]

Highly motivated, dedicated, enthusiastic and adaptable, except when it comes to writing a 1-sentence personal statement.