Advice on Business Flyer!

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Hi Guys, I have a friend who is designing me a flyer, the test it is just a sample, I want to know what you think so far and what you think could be changed or added, I have blanked of my contact details from the flyer etc as well as business name .

 
I'd have thrown it in the bin when i read "is you computer giving you grief"

Sorry, but it sounds a little geezer-ish
 
When mines giving me grief I batter it and tell it to stop getting cockey haha.

Also what do you mean by "power jacks"

Btw is this not self advertising on the forums?
 
Too many 'froms' in your pricing
Guarantee shouldn't have a capital letter
The guy in the picture should look at what he's doing too
Too much sue of the word 'also' below the card payment info.
 
Lots of mistakes on there. "Laptop screen from from £60"

The actual design isn't too bad, aside from not having the company logo and name more prominent at the top in the white space, unless that's been blanked out.
 
What does '30 days telephone support' mean?

The stupid stock photo guy looks very corporate, therefore not trustworthy. Either get a photo of yourself or just some hardware.

PCwizard4u the name?

I would change that 'special offers' to 'specialist services' and remove the from prices, again very corporate looking. Apple repairs should be relatively easy to quote an actual price (parts price depending of course.)

Change payments to 'We accept following payments'

And less Del boy on the opening, rather than is your pc giving you grief, how about 'Do you need computer support' straight up and to the point. More importantly try not to sound like a sales person, no one likes them.

Like the overall theme but not the white space at the top.
 
Personally I would avoid the .99 prices, people see through it.

Where are you marketing this, you might do well in a city with this but it needs to be more personal in a more localised area, if so get yourself on the flyer. All i think when I see the guy is he has no idea what hes doing.
 
- Pic looks too Delboy-esque
- The special offers are not special offers, they’re just prices
- From from
- Iphone / Ipad
- You need to mention that Apple owns the trademark for iPad and iPhone - see http://www.apple.com/legal/intellectual-property/guidelinesfor3rdparties.html
- guarantee, not Guarantee
- 24 hours, not 24hours
- Paypal is not a type of card
- Business’es :(
- ‘Deal with’ :(
- We also… Also we :(
 
Why reference just one brand of smartphone? It looks either like you refer to all smartphones as iPhones, or an assumption that nobody would have anything apart from an iPhone. Unless you are only interested in fixing iPhones.
 
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