Advert layout assistance

[Merlin5]

Anyone with a good eye for advert layouts? I could do with some help here if possible. I'm revamping my drum tuition card to add the young drummer of the year in as it's obviously something I should use to my advantage and then I'm going to do a new push to get more students and flood the card wherever I can; shop windows, libraries, music shops, etc. I'd like to know if you think it's good or what adjustments to make.

My original card which I've used for the last couple of years was printed up professionally for me:

http://homepage.ntlworld.com/merlin.five/Drum-Lessons border2.jpg


So now, what I've done is erased a bunch of it and added what you can see. I've changed the phone number on this image just for purposes of posting here.

http://homepage.ntlworld.com/merlin.five//Revised ad.JPG

Is there:

A. enough on the card to catch the eye (or too much)
B. should I add or remove anything
C. what about the font and size and colour
D. Buy "4 + get 1 free!" or "Buy 4, get 5!" ?

Merci.

 

[Evoss]

If I'm to be honest, the image should not be there, imo it makes it look quite armature ish (dont mean to offend, just constructive criticism)

D: "Buy 4, get 1 free" sounds better imo.

For a business card I would be more inclined to go for something like this:

Fill in the spaces with w/e

 

[Merlin5]

If I'm to be honest, the image should not be there, imo it makes it look quite armature ish (dont mean to offend, just constructive criticism)

D: "Buy 4, get 1 free" sounds better imo.

For a business card I would be more inclined to go for something like this:

Fill in the spaces with w/e

Thanks for the input. I'll change D to what you suggested. No exclamation mark then at the end?

As far as the muppet image, I generally try to appeal to a sense of fun and towards kids to start lessons, so I think it catches the eye. Also, it's not so much a business card as a much larger card to go into windows. You're right though, for my smaller pocket business card, I'll omit the image.

 

[Evoss]

Thanks for the input. I'll change D to what you suggested. No exclamation mark then at the end?

As far as the muppet image, I generally try to appeal to a sense of fun and towards kids to start lessons, so I think it catches the eye. Also, it's not so much a business card as a much larger card to go into windows. You're right though, for my smaller pocket business card, I'll omit the image.

Oh yea, I would go for "Buy 4, Get 1 Free!".

Wasn't aware it was for window advert, but a picture would appeal more to the kids as you said.

I would have a fun advert for windows and then a professional business card to give to adults/parents.

Evoss

 

[Merlin5]

Oh yea, I would go for "Buy 4, Get 1 Free!".

Wasn't aware it was for window advert, but a picture would appeal more to the kids as you said.

I would have a fun advert for windows and then a professional business card to give to adults/parents.

Evoss

Yep, indeed