Constructive Criticism Wanted

[Zebede]

Hey all, i've just put together a song, and had a bash at recording it with sequenced drums + bass.
I was wondering if you could check it over and give comments/recommendations on what I could do with it.
There are no vocals as I have no microphone but the synth is playing what the vocals would 'play' if they were there.
Thanks.

Clicky.

P.S. I apologise for the large file size.

 

[Zebede]

Thanks for your input guys.

Having re-listened to it a fair few times I agree with what you've said about the song and i'm going to try to improve it over the next few days.

Sorry tTz , post the link to the file in here if you want, i'd love to check out what styles/techniques other people use to record.

 

[Zebede]

Again, many thanks for all your comments, i'm taking them on board and re-recording the song soon with vocals.

To tTz, I already have the lyrics written, I just need the facilities to record them.

To banja, I merely uploaded the .mp3 file to my webspace and linked straight to it in my post, I didn't even realise it would play in a new window.

Also, oi, the '80s rocked.