Coverletter feedback :)

sreeve1993

sreeve1993

sreeve1993

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Hello everyone,

I would first like to apologize for another one of my 'CV/Coverletter' threads. After all the feedback I received from everyone, I really want to say a huge thank you, as I am much more confident with it.

I have one more favour, I have written up a cover letter as I have found a graduate job which Im very keen on. Link is here:

http://www.reed.co.uk/jobs/it-suppo...to-25k/25367398?source=topmenu.savedjobsdraft



Would anyone be kindly to spare a few minutes of their time to proof read my cover letter and check my final copy of my CV? :).

Note: On my cover letter there is red font, its an area where I'm 50/50 with and need a little bit of reassurance.


Cover letter : https://onedrive.live.com/redir?res...844&authkey=!ALGj6g-Rm9n8cBE&ithint=file,docx

CV : https://onedrive.live.com/redir?res...841&authkey=!AG-eIUePfanxYBE&ithint=file,docx





Let me know what you think :). I want to be different with my cover letter and really get the attention of the reader.

Stefan
 
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Thanks guys, that was one part which I couldnt decide if to keep or not and your first thoughts have clarified that haha.

It has worked for me for my past experiences but now that I'm going into more serious jobs. It sounds likes its time to get rid of it.
 
Thank you Roman, I did not realise I used 'massive', It actually made me laugh.

I researched the job requirements of a First line support, I suppose changing "it is often said that", "one must" to that "I researched" would be better
 
Hello Nomisf,

Thank you for your feedback, the degree I have is general forensic science and the reason that I don't want to go into it is because I did not enjoy it. When I got older my interests changed. Halfway through my degree It was too late to change course and instead of quitting I stayed and finished it.

The parts I did enjoy was policing, criminology and digital forensics.
 
Thanks for the feedback.

@dl880 I do agree with you, trying to sell off my degree is difficult in such a different field. I have thought about some transferred skills but they are just the typical stuff.

@Josh107, well clearly someone has changed it. My original CV does not have it haha. Think the link allows for editing, to give people to change things to show examples :). Clearly someone became the age of 11 again
 
Hi Dacads

Yeah, I think I will rephrase that paragraph to show that I possess those attributes instead of using "it often said". Did not realise how difficult it is selling yourself. I have so much to learn. I really like your improvements, it flows and I like how you leave me some space to show off my degree more! Which clearly I need to do, need to have a good think what skills I can transfer! I have a few already :).

@flyingphil I agree with all what you are saying about needing to show off my degree more. Did not think of report writing and data analysis, thanks :).
With the other part, I did change this part a bit but you've gave better advise on what else to put it.

Hopefully I will get this all sorted and at a top notch standard. I've had calls from agencies but they seem like time wasters and will just fine the best best with all the qualifications blah blah and forget about everyone else.
 
I quickly "googled" job description of a Forensic Scientist to help me out and found some very good transferable skills to IT, which infact I also have. Bonus!

I will use your template Dacads and tweak it and definitely show off my degree more. I'm proud of it and I need to show it.

I have registered to a few so far, mostly registered to job sites. Still need to sign up to indeed, jobsite, totaljobs.
 
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