Having seen many of these sent out by people (mostly to chambers for mini-pupillages, but also to solicitor's for work experience/training contracts) I can tell you that what's there isn't nearly of the quality needed unfortunately.
First of all the personal statement should be the best part of 1/2-3/4 a page. Think of it as a separate letter that is structured roughly like this:
very briefly why you want to visit that particular firm
who the hell are you
what you've been up to
why you want to do that area of law
why that firm fits with what you've just said
dates that you're available and closing.
Then obviously you have the CV. I see moots mentioned in the CV, but not any negotiation or client-interviewing. I realise not every uni does negotiation, but I thought they all did client-interviewing?
'Tort with mooting' - that's incorrect right? They don't really provide some bastardised tort/mooting option do they? Presumably that's meant to be 'tort, mooting,etc'. If you mean that you've done lots of tort based moots just put down mooting.
Contract law, tort and public law are all basics that you HAVE to do to get an LLB at every university so there's no point putting them down as they're not specialisations at all.
Do you have a predicted grade for your LLB yet?
I can't see mention of any internal or external competitions - surely you've taken place in at least one internal competition?
Get back to us once you've made those changes
