CV Help Please

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 21:31

Hi all, I’m 18 and have just finished college and am now looking for a top as an IT Technician. My uncle knows of a job available in the company he works for, just what I would like to do, IT Technician/Networking. Here is my CV can you have a look and let me know what you think and what you would change

Thanks, all comments (good or bad) welcome

CV

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 22:10

Third Opinion said:
No disrespect but it looks horrible. Lose the borders and boxes it looks a bit tacky.

A personal profile should be written from a third person perspective so it should never contain "I...". It is also a little long, try to make it short and punchy.

On the whole a CV should be two complete pages long you have twice that. The qualifications you should emphasize on should be relevant. Shorten the hobbies and interests it can give you something to talk about in an interview.

Don't take it the wrong way some may love it. If you need help give me a shout I use to write them for long term unemployed/college leavers.

Is this getting any better now.....

Take 2

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 22:30

tenchi-fan said:
Information in your CV just isn't presented clearly.
There are too many long paragraphs, and your "work experience" is cluttered into two big paragraphs... why not lay it out in the same way as "employment history" where you can see the company name and start and end dates, followed by bullet-points of your responsibilities.
Have a seperate heading for your "BTEC National Diploma" with start and end dates and where you studied it, instead of mentioning it in a paragraph.
You seem to use [edit] italics and underline for headings and subheadings. It's a bit hard to follow.

SO should be like so..

Details
Personal Statement
Work Exp.
Qualifications
Skills
Vol. work
Refs.

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peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 22:37

Keep it coming guys im changing it as we speak !

thanks

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 22:47

Hows this....

Take 3

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 22:59

Brum Man said:
Where's your CV gone, all I can see is a couple of boxes with writing in it!

Give me your e-mail address and I'll send you mine as an idea as to what I would class as an ok CV.

[email protected] use that one

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 23:10

AcidHell2 said:
http://www.upload2.net/page/download/Tv8Zr8OWqydfRNJ/CV+revamp.doc.html

Try to remove all the "I" in the paragraphs, Also you start two consecutive sentences with "I am". Try not to repeat things like this.

Also Key skills should be right under name and address. Its the first thing. It needs to be customized to what the advert is looking at.

Also if you have D.O.B you don't need age.

How would you word that personal profile then mate not to great at that sort of thing. :rolleyes:

peter212693 · 25 Sep 2006 at 23:19

Thanks very much for everyones help this evening this has really helped me with my CV looks much better then the original!

thanks again
Pete

This is how its going to be:

Final Draft