CV Suggestions

Dev2 · 11 Feb 2010 at 00:03

There is a job opportunity for me to tutor a young teenager Java in Florida. The payment is very generous and I would like make sure my CV is up to scratch.

I submitted my CV to them before but the trip was postponed and I asked for my CV to be removed so I could re-submit it at a later date as I would complete more course modules and gain experience in the meantime. They've contacted me requesting my CV and an interview.

Any suggestions on what I should add/remove. I'm planning on sending it in 20 minutes?

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Profile
I have a diverse range of interests including music, movies, pop-culture reading, international rugby, video games, history and economics. I actively involve myself in a few societies in the college. I also love traveling and have been to many countries in Europe and have been to the US on more than a few occasions.
My mother is from upstate New York and subsequently I hold Irish and American passports. I have two little brothers and two little sisters who I regularly help with their homework. I lead an active social life and would consider myself as having a relaxed personality. I’ve a keen interest in computers and have engaged myself in the practice of fixing and building computers from a very young age.

Responsibilities
During my college years I have gained extensive experience (4 years) as a bar tender for a variety of pubs/clubs/hotels as well as concerts and festivals. In some cases I was given the responsibility to open and close, count tills, order stock and oversee other staff. I regularly accept offers to babysit kids for local families. I regularly volunteer my efforts for college societies helping to organize events. I hold the position of technical officer on one of the TCDs Sci-Fi society which is one of the largest in the college.

Education
I attended a boarding school, Kilkenny College and achieved honor grades in Economics, Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry for my Leaving Certificate. In second year I received an award for top 10% academic achievement out of 150 students.
I’m currently a Junior Sophistor student studying for a B.A.(Mod) in Computer Science in Trinity College Dublin and I’m currently aiming for a 2.1 grade in my degree to further my studies with an M.Sc in Computer Science. As part of our course we are expected to have proficiency in a variety of areas. Relevant to the current opportunity Java is the primary language in our introduction to programming and software engineering modules in our freshmen year. It is also implicitly covered in many sections of the course including telecommunications and group projects throughout our four years. I would feel confident in tutoring a young teenager or any beginner level student this language to a level expected for university freshmen.

Programming Languages
C/C++, Java, Eiffel, SQL, Prolog, Motorola 68332 assembly and currently learning Python and C# outside of my school work. I’m also familiar with Java libraries for networking, graphical user interfaces, code optimization and concurrent programing. I also have a firm grasp of various necessary common algorithms that are expected to be imparted when tutoring programming.

Viper² · 11 Feb 2010 at 00:08

I'm no expert on CVs but a few nitpicky things..

I have two little brothers and two little sisters who I regularly help with their homework and lead an active social life and would consider myself as having a relaxed personality.

It sounds like you lead an active social life with your little brothers and sisters. And you used 'and' twice in a sentence.. it just sounds wrong.

I hold a committee position on one of the larger societies.

Maybe say something about the position and society?

I’m also familiar with Java libraries for networking and graphical user interfaces. I’m also familiar with code optimization and concurrent programing.

Two consecutive sentences starting with "I'm also familiar with". Join them together or change one.

Daaaveee · 11 Feb 2010 at 00:10

^ this.

Good luck with your application!

Dev2 · 11 Feb 2010 at 00:12

Good suggestions! I hope my alterations alleviate them.

Anyone else spot anything?

Thanks,
Dev.

xyphox · 11 Feb 2010 at 00:19

You need to make use of bullet points. Employers want a simple run-down for education and work experience, not a story. Your waffling too much.

Dev2 · 11 Feb 2010 at 01:15

Normally I'd be inclined to agree but the opportunity isn't commercial in nature as I would be traveling with the family on holiday so I figured giving some background isn't ott as the CV is less that 500 words. If other members disagree though I might revise this.

I'll leave sending it till tomorrow evening so I'm still open to suggestions.

Stupot_ · 11 Feb 2010 at 01:20

What exactly is this arrangement?

Some kind of trip over there where you live in with a family and do tutoring?

I can appreciate it's less commercial, but still, I think the layout needs to be a bit more concise. It would be better if you posted a jpeg of the word file so we can see what all the formatting looks like. Bullets, as suggested would help.

This could then be accompanied by a really good covering letter that takes care of all the waffly bits

meghatronic · 11 Feb 2010 at 01:23

No disrespect, but it seems more like a story of your life, rather than a CV. It has far too much prose for my taste.

Dev2 · 11 Feb 2010 at 01:29

Stupot_ said:
Some kind of trip over there where you live in with a family and do tutoring?

Yup, All expenses paid holiday to Florida and I also receive a nice wage. I suspect the dad has seen his son might have an interest in computing and wants to give him a head start. The job requirement is that I tutor three hours a day for two weeks.

As noted I'll slim down the writing.