Fixing up my CV (Help required)

Your personal profile is in third person however the rest of your CV isn't. Seems rather odd and just wrong.

The blue headings take up too much space and look unprofessional and i'm not too fond of the font either. Personal preference I guess :p
 
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Garee said:
Your personal profile is in third person however the rest of your CV isn't. Seems rather odd and just wrong.
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I was told to put personal profile into 3rd person by someone, wasn't sure why, it was 1st person before. Think I should change it back?
 
you have a HND in electronic engineering yet no experience of employment in this field? are you applying for jobs in this field? i am assuming you've had no employment in this field as you have been unable to be successful in receiving a job offer. if this is the case, you need to include this hardship in your statement or covering letter and make it clear that even though you obtained your hnd 18 months ago and are not working in the field of your hnd, you have still tried to remain 'in the loop' of the industry by keeping on top of any new regulations etc
 
Is there anty particular reason your personal statement appears to be written in the 3rd person? Unless it was actually written by someone else, it comes off slightly odd.

"Also very knowledgeable in computer hardware too", only use one adverb.

To be honest, drop the "very knowledgeable" bit, its meaningless, I would go with "advanced knowledge of", or something slightly more absolute.Might also be worth toning down the part about fixing PC's, unless you are absolutely sure you can diagnose and fix anything, it might be worth going with something along the lines of "Confident in diagnosing and fixing many hardware faults".

Reword the entire last sentence, it's both too long and too vague.

"Skills learnt from this were", change it to "Key skills developed" or something.

Interests....yeah you may be being honest but tone it down, lose "playing games with friends" and "going out and socialising", also shorten most of them, use single words like "travelling" and "exercise".
 
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"knowledgeable about most things to do with computer software" sounds too chatty. I'd put: "Familiarity with many software packages, including...".

The final sentence of your profile is far too long. Split it up a bit.

"during this position" sounds a bit off. Maybe try "whilst working in this position".

Add the word "in" to "what class the passengers were travelling".

Split up the sentence about the police requests.

"keeping and tidy work environment" doesn't make sense.

"helping customers with many different things they may need" sounds weird. Maybe try "helping customers with enquiries".

I'd miss out "pass grade" in your AS levels. I'm guessing you didn't get a high mark, in which case I'd just put "AS level in Chemistry". To me it sounds better.

I'd skip the "playing computer games" and "socialising". They're obvious and don't add anything.

Also, the profile is very strange in the third person. I don't bother with a profile at all, and prefer to include something similar in the cover letter where it seems more natural.
 
cm1179 said:
you have a HND in electronic engineering yet no experience of employment in this field? are you applying for jobs in this field? i am assuming you've had no employment in this field as you have been unable to be successful in receiving a job offer. if this is the case, you need to include this hardship in your statement or covering letter and make it clear that even though you obtained your hnd 18 months ago and are not working in the field of your hnd, you have still tried to remain 'in the loop' of the industry by keeping on top of any new regulations etc
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Not had the chance to get into the field at all, been trying, but I guess I'll need to just include all that in a covering letter when I send it off to particular companies. Which reminds me, I need to add in skills with physical electronic equipment into the CV, ta.

mattx2 said:
Personal profile is too long and you need a separate skills section to list programs used etc
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Will try and separate them.

Fenris said:
Is there anty particular reason your personal statement appears to be written in the 3rd person? Unless it was actually written by someone else, it comes off slightly odd.

"Also very knowledgeable in computer hardware too", only use one adverb.

To be honest, drop the "very knowledgeable" bit, its meaningless, I would go with "advanced knowledge of", or something slightly more absolute.

Reword the entire last sentence, it's both too long and too vague.

"Skills learnt from this were", change it to "Key skills developed" or something.

Interests....yeah you may be being honest but tone it down, lose "playing games with friends" and "going out and socialising", also shorten most of them, use single words like "travelling" and "exercise".
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Will make these changes now, thanks. :)
 
Looks good to me except the 3rd person to first person after the profile. Out of interest what were you going to apply for since you have the engineering btec?
 
Yateszy said:
Looks good to me except the 3rd person to first person after the profile. Out of interest what were you going to apply for since you have the engineering btec?
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Yeah I changed that already, I'm applying for anything at all, just need a new job after my temp contract expires :)
 
Don't list GCSEs, just say # A-C GCSEs including English and Maths. I also just list the subjects for my A levels and don't specify the grade.
 
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