Is this CV Profile ok?

[sid]

Hi,

This is just for a student CV, nothing professional. Im only looking for a supermarket job perhaps. I know the sentences are fragments but is that ok these days because thats what I am seeing on the samples online?

Here it is.

"A young and enthusiastic student looking for part-time work to cover living costs in London. Available during holidays and term-time. A good team player who enjoys working with other people. Through my school years and extra-curricular activities, I have gained numerous transferable skills such as computing and inter-personal communications which would be useful in the workplace."

Any mistakes on there?#

thanks a lot

sid

 

[sid]

At first you talk in third person "A good team player...", but then you swap back to talking first person e.g "I have gained numerous skills...". Apart from that i dont see anything wrong with it.

how would i write tht in 3rd person

 

[sid]

off topic but why 'has', i thought it would be 'have'

 

[sid]

Thats what I was thinking brocksta , but then again I don't know much either.

 

[sid]

Ok thanks a lot, I think thats that sorted then

sid