Is this CV Profile ok?

sid

sid

sid

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Hi,

This is just for a student CV, nothing professional. Im only looking for a supermarket job perhaps. I know the sentences are fragments but is that ok these days because thats what I am seeing on the samples online?

Here it is.

"A young and enthusiastic student looking for part-time work to cover living costs in London. Available during holidays and term-time. A good team player who enjoys working with other people. Through my school years and extra-curricular activities, I have gained numerous transferable skills such as computing and inter-personal communications which would be useful in the workplace."

Any mistakes on there?#

thanks a lot

sid
 
Add some cack about being a people person and willingness to help, other than that, looks ok.
 
At first you talk in third person "A good team player...", but then you swap back to talking first person e.g "I have gained numerous skills...". Apart from that i dont see anything wrong with it.
 
brocksta said:
At first you talk in third person "A good team player...", but then you swap back to talking first person e.g "I have gained numerous skills...". Apart from that i dont see anything wrong with it.
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how would i write tht in 3rd person
 
I would think its better staying away from talking in third person, and keep everything to "I am....". However im far from an expert at this and i may be wrong. For example:

"I am a young and enthusiastic student who enjoys working with other people and a good team player. I am looking for part-time work to cover living costs in London and available during holidays and term-time.

Through my school years and extra-curricular activities, I have gained numerous transferable skills such as computing and inter-personal communications which would be useful in the workplace."
 
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