Is this CV Profile ok?

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Hi,

This is just for a student CV, nothing professional. Im only looking for a supermarket job perhaps. I know the sentences are fragments but is that ok these days because thats what I am seeing on the samples online?

Here it is.

"A young and enthusiastic student looking for part-time work to cover living costs in London. Available during holidays and term-time. A good team player who enjoys working with other people. Through my school years and extra-curricular activities, I have gained numerous transferable skills such as computing and inter-personal communications which would be useful in the workplace."

Any mistakes on there?#

thanks a lot

sid
 

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brocksta said:
At first you talk in third person "A good team player...", but then you swap back to talking first person e.g "I have gained numerous skills...". Apart from that i dont see anything wrong with it.

how would i write tht in 3rd person
 
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I would think its better staying away from talking in third person, and keep everything to "I am....". However im far from an expert at this and i may be wrong. For example:

"I am a young and enthusiastic student who enjoys working with other people and a good team player. I am looking for part-time work to cover living costs in London and available during holidays and term-time.

Through my school years and extra-curricular activities, I have gained numerous transferable skills such as computing and inter-personal communications which would be useful in the workplace."
 
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