only watched the first minute.
change your intro. Its far too "in your face" Needs to be more mellow. Dont like the bass/boom thing.
mic or sound issues?
also if you are doing a BLIND playthrough maybe state it in the video description/title. Blind plays are vastly different.
also uhh 720p ? tbh i dont watch anything that is 720p. Is this 2010?
will update further.
Just more info on the "blind" stuff. Basically you need to state this because blind plays contain a lot of dead time so to speak. You got a 30 minute long video man. I would shorten it to maximum of 20 or even 15 minutes. I would also do minimum of 1080p / 1440p. (some watch on very big screens

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Also if you knew what you were doing you could focus your voice on entertaining us rather than wondering what to do?