Missus + job supporting statement = FAIL

nightmare99

nightmare99

nightmare99

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Would a kind person have a look over a supporting statement my better half has written for a job application?

Shes pretty useless at that sort of thing and to be honest I'm not really up on modern job application wording supporting docs etc

I think it looks pap, is this really how it should be written?

What attracted me to this particular post is that I could put into practice the skills I have gained both in my previous employment and what I have gained in my study. I very keen to pursue a career in accountancy and I am pursuing further training at college to help achieve this goal. In my current and previous employment I have always worked in a fast paced environment to strict timetables. In my current post I work within a team to complete daily tasks and provide support to the medical staff but I am often required to work alone but still provide the same level of support. I am a very confident user of the MS Office group of programs which I use both in the workplace and in everyday life and I also have experience of Sage Line 50 & Ceridian source. I am a quick accurate typist. I am quick to grasp new concepts and ideas and I enjoy challenges and problem solving. I feel I have very good organisational and time management skills which are demonstrated by combining study and work whilst raising two young children. I am keen and very enthusiastic and willing to learn and if given the opportunity, I will prove myself dedicated and capable of the role.
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Seems a bit generic and also needs to be broken up into smaller passages and paragraphs.

Try and approach it a little differently.

Rich
 
Did anyone else read the thread title and think "you have to apply to be his missus?!"

must be the lack of sleep :p
 
What attracted me to this particular post is that I could put into practice the skills I have gained both in my previous employment and what I have gained in my studies.

In my current and previous employment I have always worked in a fast paced environment to strict timetables. I am very keen to pursue a career in accountancy something which I have been training for at college in my own time to help achieve this goal.

In my current post I work within a team to complete daily tasks and provide support to the medical staff but I am able to work just as well on my own as I am often required to work alone and still provide the same level of support.

I am a quick accurate typist and have experience with the all core MS Office products, which I use both in the workplace and in everyday life as well as also having experience of Sage Line 50 & Ceridian source.

I am quick to grasp new concepts and ideas as well as enjoying the challenges and problem solving that a new position can bring, along with this i feel I have very good organisational and time management skills which are demonstrated by combining study, work and raising two young children.

I am keen and very enthusiastic and willing to learn and if given the opportunity I will prove myself dedicated and capable of the role.



Moved it around a bit, dont know what the general opinion is but hey at worst i only wasted 5 mins of my time.
 
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aproctor said:
What attracted me to this particular post is that I could put into practice the skills I have gained both in my previous employment and what those which I have gained in my studies.

In my current and previous employment I have always worked in a fast paced environment to strict timetables. I am very keen to pursue a career in accountancy something which I have been training for at college in my own time to help achieve this goal.

In my current post I work within a team to complete daily tasks and provide support to the medical staff but I am able to work just as well on my own as I am often required to work alone and still provide the same level of support.

I am a quick andaccurate typist and have experience with the all core entire MS Office product range, which I use both in the workplace and in everyday life. as wellAdditionally,as also having experience I have experience of Sage Line 50 & Ceridian source.

I am quick to grasp new concepts and ideas as well as enjoying the challenges and problem solving that a new position can bring. along with this i feel I have very good organisational and time management skills which are demonstrated by combining study, work and raising two young children.

I am keen and very enthusiastic and willing to learn and if given the opportunity I will prove myself dedicated and capable of the role.



Moved it around a bit, dont know what the general opinion is but hey at worst i only wasted 5 mins of my time.
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Stuff in red is deletions, stuff in bold is suggested edit. It gets the message across but isn't hugely professional; what kind of role is this for? It may not need to be overly wordy, after all.

Anyway, might help you :)
 
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Sorted.
 
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