part in an advert, help with application

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my girlfriend has an oportunity to be in a new Nokia advert for tv and cinemas this thursday and she needs to write an applicaiton to be able to go to the audtition.

They give you what is needed but obviously we want to improve on it and make it stand out fom any others.

trouble we have is she aint not good at english, and i have been out of school for far too long (since april) to be able to write something amazing.

can anyone help improve the following statement. length can as long as you want but obviously not too long, dont want them to getbored. Thanks all

"I am outgoing, bubbly and available for the audition on Monday 14th August and filming on the 25th and 26th August."

btw if she gets the part she will come back for shooting for 2 days and get £2000 so obviously we really would like to get it.

thanks again
 
"I give head for acting role" ;)



Works every time.... :eek:


Seriously: I am not sure what can be added to your line, its direct and to the point but it by no means stands out imo.
 
addy_010 said:
"I am outgoing, bubbly and available for the audition on Monday 14th August and filming on the 25th and 26th August."

Don't even think of using the word "bubbly", personally I think it ranks up there with "nutty" in terms of making me want to avoid a person. Maybe fun-loving or confident, but not bubbly.
 
"I am outgoing, bubbly, do bukake and im available for the audition on Monday 14th August and filming on the 25th and 26th August."
 
I wouldnt say bubbly tbh :\

"I am an outgoing, confident and professional actress. I am available for the auditions on Monday 14th August and filming on the 25th and 26th August."

Not great tbh, could do more if you give us more.
 
addy_010 said:
trouble we have is she aint not good at english, and i have been out of school for far too long (since april) to be able to write something amazing.

"she aint not good at english"

She isn't the only one .

Don't try to write something amazing , try to write something legible. ;)

Mark
 
Scam said:
"I am an outgoing, confident and professional actress. I am available for the auditions on Monday 14th August and filming on the 25th and 26th August."

Agreed, I heard somewhere bubbly implies fat. I'm out of touch with modern life though.

Is it only this statement that you will be submitting? Surely she will need to write more than that?
 
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