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Would anyone mind posting their personal statement or a sample just to get an idea.

I was looking on Google for samples and came across one done by a prospective philosophy student.

... ependent development of the individual mind is so often juxtaposed by a sub-conscious need to conform. One is often left to ponder whether in fact there remains such a thing as the individual. I have found authors such as Jeanette Winterson particularly inspirational within this subject matter. She questions norms of society, focusing particularly on gender. She corrupts traditional cultural forms like fairy stories and cultural myths to demonstrate ......

It came as a surprise. I didn't think it was the 'norm' to go into such depth. :eek::o
 
Heres mine, but i doubt its the best out there.


Real estate is a busy, fast paced and very rewarding industry that I have enjoyed since 2004 working as an estate agent. I am currently in full time employment for a company called West Wales Properties, a leading agent with branches all over Pembrokeshire and Carmarthenshire. From the first day I have expressed great interest and eagerness, working as an individual and a key team member. Meeting and dealing with a range of new people, face to face and over the phone, on a daily basis has improve my vocabulary and communication skills. This has enhanced my ability to talk to and deal with the public confidently, making me a more assured and well
spoken individual. During my time with the company I have helped establish a number of new franchises within the company, showing commitment and willingness to help to the best of my
ability. Knowing my efforts have helped and made an impact on a large business is very rewarding. Being a friendly and helpful team member will prove useful when meeting new people
and students in university.

I feel there is always room for improvement hence I am looking to participate in the studies of real estate, to expand my horizons and further my career within this ever changing industry. The course contains all that is needed to continue my career in real estate. There
are many things that I would like to learn such as planning, real estate law and the economics of the industry. Being a committed person always wanting to learn is what has driven me to take this route. I am a person who knows that hard work and dedication is needed to get
successful results.

During my time as an estate agent I have had to deal with a range of problems. I have had to deal with unhappy customers, computer related issues, planning issues and unstable sales. All of the problems require resolving to a satisfactory standard, and to meet acceptable
conclusions. Overall my work experience has helped me to develop various skills, such as teamwork, independence, showing initiative, self-motivation, problem solving, communication, reliability, responsibility and helpfulness, which have developed from working as a team, working independently, and helping customers with the various problems that they have.

Outside of work I express many interests. These include keeping fit, going to the gym and boxing throughout the week. Both of which require great determination and motivation, which are skills that I display. I regularly help the air cadet squadron with computer training, and support on days out or charity events they hold. Helping people younger than me to develop there own careers very rewarding. I have learnt many things from the various activities and jobs I have fulfilled in and outside work, which have enabled me to become more independent, and motivated which will prove useful at university.
 
Mine if you're interested

I originally started taking business studies at A-level as just an AS choice, after just a few lessons it occurred to me that I have the necessary qualities to pursue a successful career in the business world and especially, the financial area. I was immediately grasped by the various mathematical aspects involved in business and I excelled in this part of the course. I particularly like the way business is interlinked with so many parts of everyday life, you just need to open a newspaper to read hundreds of articles relating to the subject.

Since an early age, I have been deeply interested in mathematics, which would explain why I am attracted to the accountancy and financial course. I have always felt I’ve shown a very good understanding in the numerical side of maths and I have been told by teachers that I have good mental arithmetic skills. At my secondary school Tiffin, I was chosen multiple times to represent the school in the JMC (Junior Maths Challenge).

I believe the subjects I am currently studying at Esher College: IT, Business Studies, General Studies and Geography are a good platform for the course I have chosen to apply for at university; Information Technology in particular is constantly expanding and ever becoming a more important part of our lives. My skills in spreadsheet design and analysis as well as the creation of databases should prove especially useful for the accounting side of the course, as so many businesses are using these types of software in today’s world. I also gained a lot of valuable information from my Word Processing class I attended the first year, it helped improve my typing speed and my skills in designing professional looking documents.

Over the past few years I have completed various pieces of work for my father’s business, including invoices and letters to clients as well as some light accountancy work. Although the company is small, It has helped me somewhat gain a greater understanding of how businesses function.

In addition, during the summer of 2006 I spent a week at Palmers Solicitors participating in work experience; I was able to sit in during meetings with clients as well as read through certain files on the cases the company has dealt with. In terms of responsibilities, I was handed the role of organising important files of one of the company’s partners, containing client information and past cases from the last 35 years.

Throughout my school years I have also taken part in many sports activities. For several years I was a member of the Tiffin athletics and cross country team, of which I was appointed captain during Year 8. I have also participated in athletics and cross country running at county and national level, representing Richmond upon Thames in the London Youth Games and Surrey in the London Mini Marathon respectively.

Pretty crap if you ask me but it got me 5 offers!
 
I hated writing my personal statement, it's the worst kind of box-ticking **** and everybody writes the same thing, best advice is look at what's on your prospective course that sounds really boring (like Medieval literature in my case) then say you love it.
 
I would post mine, but most of its about working on Concorde, so it doesn't really help :p

Got me accepted into Bristol Uni, Southampton, Bath, Imperial and possibly loughborough (got an interview but couldn't go so they are doing it on my UCAS form).
 
do they even read them all ?

i thought they just read it if you were borderline for getting on the course or not

mine was pretty poo and i got all the offers i wanted
 
do they even read them all ?

i thought they just read it if you were borderline for getting on the course or not

mine was pretty poo and i got all the offers i wanted

I'm pretty sure they read through the whole thing. As it is a compulsory part of the application.
 
I found it hard to write that many pages, lol what size font did you use ! :p

14, and just to prove how much bs it was i got a letter from lester (i cant spell it) telling me about their foot ball team and brilliant footy ground, and if azza's around here he'll tell you just how badly i fail at any sport that requires standing up.
 
Here's mine for History, it's an alright statement I guess, either way it lowered my offer from AAB to three B's which I failed anyway and still got in!

Discovering the ancient Minoans, Phoenicians and Hittites first sparked my interest in history. I encountered them from the computer game Age of Empires and since have been fascinated. After reading further into these subjects; I developed a keen interest in ancient history and have read M. T. Griffin’s Nero: End of a Dynasty as a result. Studying history at GCSE and college pushed me beyond the boundaries of ancient history, and introduced me to modern history. This is an area of history, particularly communist Russia that I am now very comfortable with, and prepared me for the level of work to be expected at AS level.


For my individual assignment this year I have decided to return to an area of ancient history that originally fascinated me. My study of Emperor Nero’s Rome has been a welcome if challenging return to ancient history after studying modern history at GCSE and A-level. My decision to study an area of ancient history is born out of my desire to study beyond modern history, something I hope to be able to continue to do at University. As well as studying contemporary historians for my individual assignment I have been reading into the works of Tacitus, in particular the Annals of Rome, as these have proven essential for my debate. My question revolves around whether Nero’s personality influenced the governance of Rome, as I feel that history is not simply about objectively looking at events. By examining a personality a greater level of subjectivity is added. E.H. Carr clearly outlines that History is entirely subjective, much like Nero’s ‘madness’.


My interest in communist Russia has led me to read Sebag-Montefiore’s Stalin: The Court of the Red Tsar. It also caused me to develop an interest in the language which is why last year I enrolled in an evening course to learn Russian language and have already completed my ABC entry course with the hope of obtaining my level 1 qualification this year. I am also a member of the historical thinking group. In this group we have so far discussed the work of E.H. Carr and G.R.Elton and are currently researching and debating the various interpretations of history that are available, as displayed in Elton’s Which Road to the Past?: Two Views of History.


Studying English Literature has improved my ability to formulate well versed arguments in my essays and address the structure of a debate. Law and psychology, being the more objective out of my subject choices, have taught me the skills of interpretation and analysis that have recently proved invaluable in assessing the provenance of my sources for my individual assignment. Psychology, as well as offering research skills also provides a form of insight into the personalities that we continually assess throughout history; this, like the research has proven invaluable for my personality question for my individual assignment.


After my initial degree I would be interested in achieving a masters qualification in history. Reading Mark Steel’s Vive Le Revolution has inspired me to write in a similar comic non-fiction style as it is important that history should not become a subject that is just read in the classroom, it should always be easily accessed without the need for specialist knowledge.
 
Would anyone mind posting their personal statement or a sample just to get an idea.

I was looking on Google for samples and came across one done by a prospective philosophy student.



It came as a surprise. I didn't think it was the 'norm' to go into such depth. :eek::o

personal statement to get into anywhere except cambridge and oxford...

"i have a bit of money, and am capable of qualifying for a student loan, you will get money off government from me being here, uni is crap in the uk now and no one really cares who is let in anymore"

if you want to get into oxford or cambridge

"i have a bit MORE money, and am capable of qualifying for a student loan, you will get money off government from me being here, uni is crap in the uk now and no one really cares who is let in anymore however, they called me "toff" throughout highschool because i talk proper"
 
14, and just to prove how much bs it was i got a letter from lester (i cant spell it) telling me about their foot ball team and brilliant footy ground, and if azza's around here he'll tell you just how badly i fail at any sport that requires standing up.

Slightly concerning that someone can apply to a Uni without being able to spell it (unless you're dyslexic obviously).
 
personal statement to get into anywhere except cambridge and oxford...

"i have a bit of money, and am capable of qualifying for a student loan, you will get money off government from me being here, uni is crap in the uk now and no one really cares who is let in anymore"

if you want to get into oxford or cambridge

"i have a bit MORE money, and am capable of qualifying for a student loan, you will get money off government from me being here, uni is crap in the uk now and no one really cares who is let in anymore however, they called me "toff" throughout highschool because i talk proper"

Load of crap if i'd ever seen any to be honest. Oxford and Cambridge are letting in increasing amounts from state schools. Universities in the UK aren't crap. Agreed there is qualification inflation but it doesn't stop a degree being worthwhile.
 
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