IT Admin CV Critique

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RoboCod

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Friend of mine has asked me to look at her CV, for some reason she thinks I'm good at these :confused:

I haven't had time to have a really good look over it yet and will in detail tonight. After a quick cursory glance I picked up on the overuse of the words "numerous" and "various", I don't like these ambiguous meanings and would delete them out. The About Me section is weak and could be written better and the education should be chronologically ordered from most recent and down.

Anything else and any critique would be much appreciated! I'm sure there are many better CV writers here than I and she is applying for another IT role, something I know very little about.

Thanks for your help, it will save me a lot of time tonight so it is much appreciated

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What, you mean neither of you don't have a crapbox email for signing up to stuff you know will attract spam, i.e. exactly this sort of thing? How odd.
 
This probably isn't helpful but I can't imagine why she'd apply for another IT role.

Why not try for something along the psychology lines - where her heart lies, presumably?
 
My first impressions:

- Delete date of birth and home address, not needed.
- Delete about me and change it to a professionally-focused personal profile section at the top of the CV. If employers want to know your favourite band they can ask you at interview.
- Remove reference section, as people could take that to mean they can contact your current employer immediately. It goes without saying that references are available on request.
- Use a more modern font, e.g. Calibri or Verdana.
- Change 'Experience' to 'Professional History'.
- 2002-2005 Menswear Retailer - the title and the bullet points cross pages, imo she should try and avoid this break up. Also the organisation isn't justified with the other headings, though this might be a result of you editing it for security.
- Inconsistent capitalisation of job roles.
- Write in the third person.
 
What Robbie said, only exception being only write in the third person if it's going through an agency (it saves them having to do it, and recruitment agencies love doing as little work as possible). If you're applying direct don't write in third person, it's antiquated and comes across as egocentric in this age.

It's also possible to write it with no third or first person identifiers. It's your CV, they know who it's for. That means you can often just use phrases to describe achievements and skills without having to identify ownership in full sentences.
 
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There is no particular detail of IT systems, if its an IT job wanted you really need to go into some more detail. I would leave the DOB in as it does make a difference. The about me section is too long, junk it all and start with a personal statement, granted its mostly flaff but I do expect to see them.
 
Agencies delete date of birth when they pass them to the client (or at least mine did). The company can work it out roughly from your chronology anyway.

Here's my CV as an example, I've done pretty well with it without blowing my own trumpet. People have since advised me against an 'other IT' section but I've stuck with it. The value of page numbers and headers and footers are also debatable.

When I say write in the third person, this is my CV and you can see that I didn't really mean write like 'Robbie G excels at plugging in network cables' for example:

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I've actually just spotted a minor mistake in my CV since posting it.
 
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I'm no expert but from looking at it I would say you could easily condense eveything that is relevant to the IT role she is applying for onto 1 page.

It looks as though someone has told her it has to be 2 pages and it is stretched out to meet that.

There are some capitals for titles that look a bit odd.

"Maintaining a professional attitude and representation of myself and the organisation both within and out of work" - this sounds a bit "wishy washy" to me, and doesn't read very well.
 
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