Remove driving license/rail card, who cares!
Make telephones on 1 lines.
Remove GCSEs, also remove silcoates school. removed the work experience bototom of page 2, you already list in detail your work experience. To your personal statement you could add something like 4 years IT experience.
Your IT skills section may not be useful, e.g. using microsoft products hardly makes for an envious skillset and would be expected anyway.
So much of your text can be massively condensed by more careful wording, ordering of clauses, sentence structure. I don't have time to re-write everything but I expect you could half the number of words without removing any content.
E.g.
"Carried out independent reviews (acted as a reviewer), for designs"
vs
"Independently reviewed designs. "
Higher up you said you worked on bespoke software and then named it. Well if it is bespoke then no one will have heard about it or care what it was called!
"...using cable schematics produced in MS Visio"
Does it matter what software was used to make the schematics, I doubt it, just say you used cable schematics"
Just have a good long hard look at every word you used, see if all of it is needed, if it adds useful information that is relevant for you to get the job. See if you can restructure a sentence, changing the order of clauses to reduce words.
Don't be afraid to simply make a 2 or 3 column bullet point of skills/techniques/knowledge/experience for each job, just listing keywords that an employer is looking for. Complete English sentences are not always needed, especially if they have lots of filler and duplicates.
Make telephones on 1 lines.
Remove GCSEs, also remove silcoates school. removed the work experience bototom of page 2, you already list in detail your work experience. To your personal statement you could add something like 4 years IT experience.
Your IT skills section may not be useful, e.g. using microsoft products hardly makes for an envious skillset and would be expected anyway.
So much of your text can be massively condensed by more careful wording, ordering of clauses, sentence structure. I don't have time to re-write everything but I expect you could half the number of words without removing any content.
E.g.
"Carried out independent reviews (acted as a reviewer), for designs"
vs
"Independently reviewed designs. "
Higher up you said you worked on bespoke software and then named it. Well if it is bespoke then no one will have heard about it or care what it was called!
"...using cable schematics produced in MS Visio"
Does it matter what software was used to make the schematics, I doubt it, just say you used cable schematics"
Just have a good long hard look at every word you used, see if all of it is needed, if it adds useful information that is relevant for you to get the job. See if you can restructure a sentence, changing the order of clauses to reduce words.
Don't be afraid to simply make a 2 or 3 column bullet point of skills/techniques/knowledge/experience for each job, just listing keywords that an employer is looking for. Complete English sentences are not always needed, especially if they have lots of filler and duplicates.