Gold and Duke of Edinburgh Award ?
IT Admin CV Critique
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Gold and Duke of Edinburgh Award ?
Caporegime
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Caporegime
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- Warwickshire
Not at all Mr. Planet. I sort of butchered someone else's to reach mine anyway.
I've made some more annotations:
http://www.mediafire.com/?wakmgpqxybt7mun
Much better layout but I got a load of green squigily lines under the profile section
. I write my CV in the 3rd person but I do use the occasional "I" if it doesn't flow correctly without it. eg:
With a logical approach to [...], I am in a good position to [achieve something for you]
Sentences are too short:
Enjoys working solely on initiative, or in a team. Reliable, trustworthy, hard-working and eager to learn.
Doesn't flow well and sounds like a list of clichés (although I understand this is still a rough draft).
Achievements need to be in the format:
1. What you did
2. What skills/technologies you used
3. How it improved things - eg. saved the business money/time (use numbers)
I always perform the "so what?" test on CVs. Read something you've written and ask yourself "so what?". Why would anyone care about this statement? If the answer is "they wouldn't" then remove it or change it. It's example time again:
Regular contact with council colleagues, Senior managers and Corporate Directors, District Councillors and the general public.
This bullet point doesn't really tell me anything. Everybody has contact with their colleagues so this is like saying "I wake up in the morning". Plus there is already a bullet point about building relationships with colleague at the bottom.
You need to state why you had contact with all of these senior people. What were you doing for them in an IT capacity?
Is this girl really an IT admin? There's not a single mention of Windows versions, servers, networks etc. I admit I don't know what any of this stuff is apart from ESRI GIS:
UNIFORM & Web Access Module/Public Access, GMS Exchange, TLC, Idox DMS, ESRI GIS
But having it all listed in one bullet point doesn't make it seem important. Spread it out over more bullet points and explain what you did with it.
http://www.mediafire.com/?wakmgpqxybt7mun
Much better layout but I got a load of green squigily lines under the profile section
. I write my CV in the 3rd person but I do use the occasional "I" if it doesn't flow correctly without it. eg:With a logical approach to [...], I am in a good position to [achieve something for you]
Sentences are too short:
Enjoys working solely on initiative, or in a team. Reliable, trustworthy, hard-working and eager to learn.
Doesn't flow well and sounds like a list of clichés (although I understand this is still a rough draft).
Achievements need to be in the format:
1. What you did
2. What skills/technologies you used
3. How it improved things - eg. saved the business money/time (use numbers)
I always perform the "so what?" test on CVs. Read something you've written and ask yourself "so what?". Why would anyone care about this statement? If the answer is "they wouldn't" then remove it or change it. It's example time again:
Regular contact with council colleagues, Senior managers and Corporate Directors, District Councillors and the general public.
This bullet point doesn't really tell me anything. Everybody has contact with their colleagues so this is like saying "I wake up in the morning". Plus there is already a bullet point about building relationships with colleague at the bottom.
You need to state why you had contact with all of these senior people. What were you doing for them in an IT capacity?
Is this girl really an IT admin? There's not a single mention of Windows versions, servers, networks etc. I admit I don't know what any of this stuff is apart from ESRI GIS:
UNIFORM & Web Access Module/Public Access, GMS Exchange, TLC, Idox DMS, ESRI GIS
But having it all listed in one bullet point doesn't make it seem important. Spread it out over more bullet points and explain what you did with it.
Did you check with her before you posted her CV on a public forum?
EDIT: Just seen that you tried to anonymise it. Her full name is still embedded in there though.
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Thanks very much for this. Regards the IT systems; I don't have a clue myself about that area so I will have to chat with her about what you mentioned and how she can bulk out better with what she actually does, only she knows.
Call me daft, but I can't see where
Call me daft, but I can't see where
It's a property of the document. In Word 2007 onwards, click File then Info and look at properties on the right.
Ah well that is easily rectified.
I haven't taken a look at the Cv (I'm in work) but if she's applying for the job directly then tailor the CV for that specific role. Make sure she lists skills which the job has asked for - as long as she has them of course!