Personal Statement

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does anyone know on anyway in which i can start my personal statement for a doing a computing HND course at my local college?

i have looked online and can't seem to find any ones that are good and free. I just need a helping hand with the first sentence or 2. from there on its simple as i have that part all worked out

thanks chaps
 
Whatever you do don't start with "My name is blabla" because it is my opinion that doing that is really lame on letters and such. Although most here would probably disagree with me. Start by explaining your interest in computing and lead on to talk about your HND and various other things. I know it sounds crazy but if you sound like you have enthusiasm and interest in computing from the first sentence they will enjoy reading it I think.

edit: Ahh Crispy Pigeon beat me to it with an identical suggestion :p
 
I never did one myself but i have a copy of my mates. Dunno if its any good.

Personal Statement
I have always wanted to be a Primary School Teacher. I feel I have excellent personal
qualities which would enable me to perform my duties to the best of my ability and be
beneficial to the children. I am told by staff that I am an excellent listener and I have a
very caring and friendly approach to people. Many of my school reports state that I am a
pleasure to teach with an excellent conduct record.
In my latter years of Primary, I thoroughly enjoyed my position of supervising and managing
many activities and events along with my classmates such as sports and fun days, holiday
discos and dances, and assisting in teaching less advanced pupils. In my third year of High
school I requested to work in a Primary school as my Community Placement. This was my first
real taste of hands on teaching which I felt was challenging but equally rewarding. By the
end of the first day I concluded teaching requires a great deal of preparation and motivation.
To aid my application I have taken the opportunity to be a classroom assistant at my old
primary school. In assisting the teacher I lead small groups of children with their
schoolwork. I have been given the responsibility of correcting the children's schoolwork
which I find is a great opportunity to demonstrate my teaching skills. In my more recent
courses I have picked a wide range of subjects that are of great relevance to the Primary
education system. I have also acquired Spanish at Higher level as it is of great importance
to the younger generations and is the most taught language in Primary schools today.
This experience has confirmed my commitment to becoming a teacher in the future and I look
forward to it immensely. Although it's only for a few hours each week it has given me a great
insight into how the teachers cope in the classroom and the challenges which can arise day to
day and how to deal with them. I also participate in the after school badminton club. After
attending the open day at your campus I was dismayed to find a large number of individuals
drop out in the first two years I would like to say as a potential student that I am fully
committed to this profession and would welcome the chance to prove myself at an interview.
In my spare time I play many sports such as football and badminton. I am well under way to
securing a driving licence with 15 hours under my belt. I also help my step dad to convert an
old car from an unleaded petrol engine to an environmentally friendly electric vehicle.
Playing the guitar is also one of my favourite pastimes and I find it a challenge to learn
new songs. As well as focusing my energy on progressing through my studies I really enjoy the
cinema, music and socialising with my friends.
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thanks everyone for the quick and helpful replies. I will read through the posted one and also then think about what everyone has said and then write it all tonight and if not tonihgt it will be done by tomorrow.

If i post the piece that i have by tonight anyone mind giving advice?

thanks again
 
Not a computing/I.T degree, but when I wrote a personal statement I was told and believed that they were looking for you to demonstrate an interest in the subject and why it interests you.

Give your honest opinions about it, that'd be my advice.
 
ok this is the draft i have so far. will be changed as i think it needs to be shortened down some, (anyone know how long they should be?) but i firugred i could atleast get you guys to check it out and give off some constructive critisisms.

thanks again for all the help

lol posted the messge but didnt put my personal statement lol

anyways here it is:

Having studied I.T and I.T.G.S at secondary school and spent the past 8 years of my life on computers using them for everything possible that I do, I would like to now to solely concentrate on computing at a Higher Level.

The first years in secondary school was the first chance I really got to experience computers, I had previously used them many times in primary school but never enough for anything to stick. From using them regularly in secondary school, my parents noticed this and decided to invest in buying me my own computer to further improve and increase the time in which I could spend on the computer. Almost immediately it was obvious that I had a natural ability for computers as I had an ability to learn to type quick. This led to compliments from family and friends leading to further advancement in computer skills as I wanted to impress. Having a very computer illiterate family is also partially the reason towards my interest in computers as I was the one who would be asked to fix the problem, although usually I never knew the solution straight away, I would learn to fix it through experimenting. From this I was always the person who had most knowledge and I liked the compliments, and as I got better, more people asked me for help with harder tasks, pushing me to learn how to fix bigger problems and gain more and more knowledge into general computing.

At the current time I am learning basic HTML, Photoshop, PHP + MySQL, through online forums, video training modules, and internet tutorials, and I plan on learning much more into HTML, PHP, and newer skills such as CSS and Java. I Find computers very easy to understand, and because of this I enjoy it and am encouraged to do more and more self training. So far my knowledge is basic HTML, basic PHP, and basic Photoshop. I also have a very broad knowledge on general use of computers; most everyday problems I can usually fix either by my own knowledge, or through the advice of online forums.

I have learnt many new key factors that define me over the past year. Mostly because I have had to become more independent in things such as work and school. I have seen that with persistence and the right motivation, anyone can achieve there goals, it just may take them a while for it to happen.

I am not entirely sure what it is that I would like to do on computers in my future years, this is why I choose the computing HND course as I feel that it will give an in-depth knowledge in a broad range of skills. My main interests are in web-building and coding, however I also enjoy the more graphical side to computing, using such software as Photoshop.

My current knowledge of computers is gained partially through I.T lessons at school secondary schools and I.T.G.S lessons in the I.B, but mainly comes from long periods of teaching myself at home.


Through-out the 2 years of the International Baccalaureate I also had an evening job which consisted of Monday to Friday in the evening. Although at times very difficult, I found that this has contributed to the growth of my character and has taught me important new skills. The main skill which I believe is the most important is that team work is a necessity when it comes to anything. I have viewed people working on there own, and people working as a team and the productivity of the team will always be considerably larger and a more joyful experience. Even though team work is an important skill in life I am contented that my skills with a computer are mostly self taught as this has shown me not to rely on others, that if I want to get something done I should be able to do it myself.
 
There quite a few grammar points you might want to look at, but it seems you've got a good basic structure there. I would, however, consider reducing it to about five paragraphs of roughly equal length, each dealing with a different aspect of your application.

I would rephrase the section that reads "I am not entirely sure what..." because it's a bit limp and wishy-washy. Change the focus from what you're not sure about to what you're sure about, i.e., a job in I.T.
 
tbh no one really cares about personal statements - more your marks;)

just make it short, snappy and simple. Dont pad it out or blabber. no one wants to read bull.
 
Just had to write one myself, but for a differant course. yes they are hard work. the advice i was given was its 30 seconds to sell your self. don't panic over it.

sorry but they do count. dont want to worry you but i was turned down because of my personal statement. they said my grades were fine

yes try your best and i agree don't blabber.
 
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