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loopstah said:
All this talk of writing recently has encouraged me to dig out all my notes, maps and scribbles. I've sort of ignored it for a while now, over a year, so it's about time I got back into things, and all the recent threads have spurred me on and helped me remember how much fun it is doing something creative.

Now I'm sitting at a desk covered in paper trying to categorize everything and get it onto the computer. It really makes me wish I didn't write like a drunken spider, or have a habit of scribbling stuff on notes, or the backs of envelopes or on bits of paper with completely unrelated stuff on. :(

Fun, fun, fun!
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glad you're inspired to start up again. Its better to have a note scribbled on the back of an evelope then not written down at all. I always think "na I'll be able to remember that" and never do so I always write things down now. I have a little notepad I take everywhere with me so I can always get something down.
 
not done anythin proper, but im working on some lyrics for my friends band as its somethin ive been wantin to try for a while now

i also have some really strong movie script ideas but have no idea how to go about writing it, and i dont have the time for it now either due to uni and such.
 
1. Review your use of the comma. Perhaps try using a colon or semi colon here and there.
2. Is there a particular style you are trying to use or refine here? It seems to have a mix of styles here. It struck me as a mix between a recent American style and an older English style.
2.1: You use a varied diction in this which at times works well, but at times makes what you are trying to say or illustrate more complicated than it perhaps should be.
2.2: How long did you spend thinking about this piece? Did you contrive it as it were? Or perhaps did you sit and write and see where you could go?
2.3: Is or was there a particular theme which you were writing about in this other than the obvious? I ask this because you should consider whether you are making a perhaps mundane situation into something far more complicated than it is. However, in terms of an introspective analysis of the inner workings of the psyche of a city 'drone' of some kind, your sometimes overly complex wording and long clauses are justified. But, if this kind of character representation/presentation that you were aiming for, then I'd suggest a stronger juxtaposition between the descriptions of the mundane office life and the inner workings of the somewhat frustrated mind of the protagonist vis a vis his surroundings and his reactions to said surroundings.

If you want any specific analysis I'd be happy to oblige. Hopefully these points should be helpful, as I think it's more useful to take certain aspects into consideration yourself. I think it pertinent that you should ask yourself or consider at least these few points.
 
Voltar, what do you do a job? Given your 'teacher-like' contribution to this topic, is writing/literature a hobby or occupation?
I'll pass on your comments to my friend, i'm sure he'll appreciate the feedback, thanks. Couldn't comment on his grammar tbh. His writing/imagination may be great, but his grammar may be poor, lol.
I'm a trained proof-reader from the print trade, so even though i'm not specifically trained in grammar construction, i can pretty much pick up on most type/punctuation gaffs.
i nevva reed mi own riting tho, dont nead two, its alwayes korrekt!:D
 
k.Jacko said:
Voltar, what do you do a job? Given your 'teacher-like' contribution to this topic, is writing/literature a hobby or occupation?
I'll pass on your comments to my friend, i'm sure he'll appreciate the feedback, thanks. Couldn't comment on his grammar tbh. His writing/imagination may be great, but his grammar may be poor, lol.
I'm a trained proof-reader from the print trade, so even though i'm not specifically trained in grammar construction, i can pretty much pick up on most type/punctuation gaffs.
i nevva reed mi own riting tho, dont nead two, its alwayes korrekt!:D
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Hehe I'll take that as a compliment! Thanks. I'm 20 and a 3rd year modern languages student. I've always loved literature with a passion. I love reading just about anything and have always liked lit. crit. If I can use those passions to help someone else who enjoys this area as much as I then ofc I will. I always take other writers seriously as I treat them as fellow intellectuals, hence the serious responses. Plus I figure that if you're serious about this then you'd of put plenty of thought into your work so I feel that I should write accordingly considered responses.

I might pluck up the courage to post some of my work. One of my tutors here in Spain was shocked that I wrote my 1st ever attempt at verse in Spanish and managed iambic pentameter with a loose rhyming scheme. So much so that he took it home with him :p and even made a 15min big deal over my handwriting LOL.

Anyways its the same as my thoughts on the whole online dating thing: once you've decided **** it what do I have to lose then I'm sure if I apply it to myself then I'll post my own work. Or some of it as I've only got my 1st notebook with me so age 18-present.

Voltar.
 
As you are only 20 i could have blabbed on about lack of life experience and wisdom etc etc. (not that i have any :rolleyes:)
But your post was very sincere and full of wisdom mate and yes, please do take the other post as a compliment.
You ought to post some of your stuff Voltar, let others tell you how good they think you are.
Good luck! :)
 
I write a lot pf proposals at work. I hate it, unless it is for something I have an interest in, like games or sports.

As for poetry, no, I suck at that kind of stuff :p
 
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