movie script

[FnG]magnolia · 13 Feb 2017 at 03:22

JOEY

Everything I knew was wrong. Lies, Martha. Lies.

MARTHA

YES.

JOEY[

i DONT EVEN THINK THAT 3 FOR 2 OFFER AT SAINSBURY'S IS LEGALLY BINDING,

[MARTHAT43

No toilet.

JOPEY

No toilet, not.

MART

Thank you.

[FnG]magnolia · 13 Feb 2017 at 03:36

JOE

WHY is myh solme an effiminate lady? Is there where the exposition part goes or do we do some back story firsty?

MORT
Structure, Jio, structure.

JOYEY
I have to tell the audience what is going on! How else will they know if I don't describe it exactly?

MORTo
This is a good point and also reaching the climax. Put some streing music on thank you.

JAYUAYYes, I wi9ll do that.

MARTHA[
ITS LIKE INCEPTION BUIT WORSE.

JO
I wish we were all dead so this could stop please.

MARTHA
I hate you, mom!

JOAy
aNIME IS A CONTACT SPORT!

[slow fade to black, shrieking in the background]

Ryan0r · 13 Feb 2017 at 08:15

Mag, if the spelling and formatting descending into chaos was deliberate, you win today's Internet Cookie for Bestest Lols.

sajtion · 13 Feb 2017 at 08:33

Avenged7Fold;30497566 said:
Reading in between the lines, i think they are saying that it may need some more... refining.

yeah obviously. i will rephrase a lot of things and expand it over time but i'm just happy at the moment that i have penned the general concept

Ryan0r · 13 Feb 2017 at 08:36

Question remains - out of all the scripts you have, do you have a more complete one (or just a scene or two) that we can read, if you didn't like us picking apart an unfinished one?

nick.lidgett · 13 Feb 2017 at 09:15

Keep up the good work OP

Edrof · 13 Feb 2017 at 09:42

[FnG]magnolia;30496988 said:
It's a Christmas miracle

My favourite exchange of the soon-to-be blockbuster movie?

My favourite part, too!

Lopéz;30497006 said:
I'm so glad this is a comedy because I've been sat here trying not to wet myself for the last 10 minutes. My ribs are almost literally splitting

What sort of bag?

Tesco, for the physical comedy factor.

CaptainComedy · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:03

Isn't this that movie "split"?

sajtion · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:06

Ryan0r;30497853 said:
Question remains - out of all the scripts you have, do you have a more complete one (or just a scene or two) that we can read, if you didn't like us picking apart an unfinished one?

i don't have fully ironed screenplay. i'm writing multiple scripts at once, three more comedies and one i'll just say is about sex freak ok and the theme song is going to be super freak. i got one other movie for samuel l jackson, he saves man from balcony but a lot more to story. i think it could get him an oscar and i know he never won it. i'm also writing world wide blockbuster like titanic. this movie is going to be massive and probably make billions.

ikillbears · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:09

nick.lidgett · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:10

sajtion;30498333 said:
i don't have fully ironed screenplay. i'm writing multiple scripts at once, three more comedies and one i'll just say is about sex freak ok and the theme song is going to be super freak. i got one other movie for samuel l jackson, he saves man from balcony but a lot more to story. i think it could get him an oscar and i know he never won it. i'm also writing world wide blockbuster like titanic. this movie is going to be massive and probably make billions.

Narj · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:11

Ryan0r;30497814 said:
Mag, if the spelling and formatting descending into chaos was deliberate, you win today's Internet Cookie for Bestest Lols.

People at work probably thing I'm nuts for giggling at Mags' stellar efforts.

Ryan0r · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:16

sajtion;30498333 said:
i don't have fully ironed screenplay. i'm writing multiple scripts at once, three more comedies and one i'll just say is about sex freak ok and the theme song is going to be super freak. i got one other movie for samuel l jackson, he saves man from balcony but a lot more to story. i think it could get him an oscar and i know he never won it. i'm also writing world wide blockbuster like titanic. this movie is going to be massive and probably make billions.

Sam will be delighted with this; you should get in touch with him and let him know not to worry about the pesky, elusive Oscar and that it's on its way.

What's the billion dollar blockbuster about?

sajtion · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:22

Ryan0r;30498376 said:
Sam will be delighted with this; you should get in touch with him and let him know not to worry about the pesky, elusive Oscar and that it's on its way.

What's the billion dollar blockbuster about?

i am in two minds over this one. i am either way going to do 1940 gangster movie and 1970 hells angles motorcycle gangster movie but which one i will do first i don't know. it's in the pipeline anyway

Narj · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:29

A family member of mine is a script-writer and has had several efforts commissioned. It's hard to get a break, no matter how good you are without connections.

I was amazed at how fussy the industry is regarding things like script format (eg: FD seems to be the accepted standard).

Anyways, Mags, I would watch your films.

new boy · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:31

I think this script would benefit from more stereotypes

Josh · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:43

sajtion;30498398 said:
i am in two minds over this one. i am either way going to do 1940 gangster movie and 1970 hells angles motorcycle gangster movie but which one i will do first i don't know. it's in the pipeline anyway

A Hells Angels movie or a movie about badly done geometry?

I think got for the Hells Angles angle, not been done before.

MikeTheNative · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:49

The heart warming story about Hell's Angels who give their violent ways to pursue their real passion, teaching maths to under privileged children.

Josh · 13 Feb 2017 at 11:51

MikeTheNative;30498497 said:
The heart warming story about Hell's Angels who give their violent ways to pursue their real passion, teaching maths to under privileged children.

But the children are very obtuse, to the degree that the Hells Angels to a 180 and leave.

sajtion · 13 Feb 2017 at 12:00

new boy;30498423 said:
I think this script would benefit from more stereotypes

funny you should say that because i have another movie codenamed stereotype. well, without giving too much away a married man is victim of womanizer who steal the heart of his wife leaving him. they disappear from the picture from that point and he develops a revengeful hatred for these kinds of stereotypes and set out to kill as many in the city. he is good guy and would rather shoot himself because he feels hopeless but when he comes across one such kind of person and reminds him on the man his wife run away he becomes obsessed to kill him to prevent others falling victim. it then becomes a constant run and chase movie until eventually they have epic fight in the end. there is no reason why he wanted to kill him beyond thinking that he was a bad guy and that's all

the final scene goes like this

they fight and roll on the floor somewhere in desert after car chase. he's lying on the floor almost looking dead and exhausted. he approaches the bad guy with a gun but is knocked out of his hand, then pulls him and throws a devastating punch. now roles are reversed and the bad guy has the gun while the good guy is lying.

he points the gun to his face point blank range and says

what's the matter? haven't you ever seen a bad guy win

the good guy says

yes i have (thinking of his wife and the bad guy who took her from him)

shots go off and moving ends